A Wish

hope you would enjoy my best piece written so far.......

My useless body, looks outside the window.

Sees the pleasant nature, 

comes a wish to run across the velvet grass.

The lovely rain makes me jealous,

 of children splashing in the puddles.

Once I want to wander,

 explore the fragrant flowers and the nectar fetching

 butterflies, in my garden.

The silent four corners of my room,

 reflect my helplessness and ask, 

 can my cursed body ever go out of the window?

The one who hears my unheard pain is the bed on which

 my body lies,

 since the time immemorial.

 

 

Author's Note

Thanks for reading.

Image credits goes to Google and http://www.flickr.com/photos/46987892@N05/6830788957

Reviews

[James Hanna-Magill]

Dear Devanshu

It is with absolute joy I welcome you to this website.

I am simply another aspiring writer on here and I like reviewing the words of others.

Firstly, you are very young. The internet can be a dangerous place. Take your brother's advice and help, to use it well as you are doing here.

I looked at your profile and could easily roll back the years and see a commonality in interest in the writers you like. In fact I still admire them to this day.

I praise your passion for writing.

I can see already much talent from this beautifully composed piece which celebrates the beauty of the world and nature, whilst boxed in a bedroom , when you want to be out there and enjoy it.

Some of my writing is accessible to all and some is restricted to those who are over 18.

Such are the demands of maturity.

Please may I ask you one thing?

Please keep up your passion for writing and stay on this site, which I consider a secure environment so that we can all enjoy your well constructed words and see the world as you see it for the betterment of us all.

I have a notion at 14 that you can teach me more about life and perception than I could ever teach you at 53.

Be encouraged.

I loved this piece and its perfect simplicity.

Please do not worry about reading my writing. Some of it will be restricted.

I do not require your review, just that you keep a free spirit, an open mind and teach us all .

With my warm regards


James

[Devanshu Rajput]

thank for your response ! I would certainly consider your advice.I love people of guidance and boosting confidence, because I know this is how I will learn.

Take Care!

[Writer #00]

*sniffle* This was very touching. Longing for the impossible is painful to read sometimes because of the sadness that may accompany it. Nicely written.

*/100

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks for the boosting review

[Writer #00]

No problem.

[Pax]

i see the longing of once moment was ....
wonderful work my friend...

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks for encouraging review......

[catofjade]

Ah...a kindred spirit in a kindred soul. I hear the longing in the words, but see that the author does not realize, within the beautiful ability to describe all those missed, delightful moments, lies the essence of life in all its elegance and evanescence.

[Devanshu Rajput]

your guidance helped in Curious by chance and here also.....thanks

[Mauricio Montoya]

sad but touching piece, coming to terms and acceptance.
nice work.

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[SHEEMA HUQ]

many thoughtful, fabulous lines have resulted in a great poem by you, Devanshu, very well done indeed!

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks for your all boosting feedbacks....i am grateful that you liked my pieces....

[Toddy Zed]

Awesome poem!

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[Lino Rie]

A glorious poem.^-^

[Constance Payne]

This touches my heart as I know several whose only outside experiences are those seen through the glass of the window. Beautiful.

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks............glad you liked

[Aehr]

I could feel the longing and the anguish in this piece. This one flowed like water. Great job! :D

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks for the feedback

[Aehr]

You're welcome :)