A Murderers Tale

The Biography of a cold blooded killer.

  I crept slowly along behind the girl. My footsteps hitting silently against the cement. This girl excited me and I had to have her. My pulse quickened at the thought of the scene that so swiftly approached, that was it, I couldn't wait any longer. I quickened my pace still moving silently. She was getting closer to home and the jerk in her movements suggested she had heard something. She began to move faster, I had to stop her. I began to run and she did too. I leapt for her grabbing hold of her shoulders, I swiftly covered her mouth muffling the scream. She began to writhe and kick as I drug her away down the alley. I threw her against a dumpster making a loud crash but it was okay I knew no one could hear us now.

   "Such a beautiful creature." I said as I pushed her black curls out of her eyes. "Please, Please don't do this." She begged as she sobbed and cried. "I'm sorry but I must." I said as I pulled out my favorite blade.

  A long sharp knife with a serrated edge perfect for cutting through bone. I raised the knife and caressed the girls cheek with it I could feel the tremors running through the girl. The fear almost jumping off of her. I smiled and put the knife to her neck. "Don't worry you won't feel a thing."

Reviews

[Schadenfreude]

I want so much more! But I guess you did that on purpose! Great write!

[Pax]

short that puts the reader to want more. enjoyed it.

[Lina Grey]

Though the grammar nazi in me begs to point out that quite a few of sentences are run-ons because they lack proper punctuation (meaning commas), this is an impressive piece, with a suspenseful build-up and a cliff-hanger that leaves me asking for more. A great write. Thank you.

[nigrum homonculus]

damn, i played almost every moment with an image. i love how the murderer stalking the girl was a build up. a really good short story. looking forward to more of your work.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

The writer with abilities to make the act of murder (a graphic and horrible thing) is seen as the hunter’s passionate work of art. Is a writer to reckon with? Beautiful! A true work of art.

[~Beautiful Dreamer~]

wow this was very suprizing Not at all what i would expect when i was reading the beginning. i like the way it was being like a stalker VERY AWESOME thanks for writing it

[Wild Willow Blue]

Wow, this took me for a total spin. Not what I expected when I started reading. I like the way you are describing the other person's actions versus the point-of-view of the victim. Intense emotions. Great work.