Because I'm Poisonous

Or your arrows are.

i want to misuse every love song
i want to strangle every sonnet
every ballad, every sappy poem, 
set on fire- 
for the sake of you
i want to buy their words
like petty w****s
and make them sound like us
like you and me
like you and i-
we are ephemeral,
neither you here nor i there,
i miss you
so i'll subject poetry
to misuse
just to excuse the palpitations
of my smitten little heart
with this arrow through my chest
every breath is a little shallow
i'm feeling lightheaded
from the lack of air
you almost have me believing
that i'm something worth loving
but i'm just not there
yet, and i 
i don't feel safe now
without your arms around me
holding my ugly things at bay
beside you, they are so obvious-
all the stains in my skin
from all the s**t that i've been stepping in
because you are clean, romantic romeo
and i am Juliet's Suicide-
i will only be the death of you.

Reviews

[Clockwork]

The focus of this piece almost goes back and forth between lustful one night stand and extended yearning. It seems like a plea to be clean which the speaker hopes to fulfill by engaging in actions of lust. So she gives herself physically away while burning the poems of love which she aspires secretly to be a part of, but can not see herself being a part of because they can not describe her way of loving. The lines of other poets become molten and volcanic when incorporated into their actions.

Something I found interesting: Line nineteen talks of the speaker's breaths being "Shallow." That seems like it is saying that her actions, or the feelings that come after being struck with the arrow are shallow. When that is put together with the thought of the speaker being "Juliet's suicide" and the relationship being ephemeral it paints an interesting picture.

This poem is filled with a passion and pain that stands apart from many other here.

[Amit Parmessur]

great part:

i want to misuse every love song
i want to strangle every sonnet
every ballad, every sappy poem,
set on fire-
for the sake of you
i want to buy their words
like petty w****s
and make them sound like us
like you and me
like you and i-
we are ephemeral,

[Dexter Killian]

"I am Juliets suicide"

True magic

[Robert Anderson]

whoa. that was intense. seriously... i felt you. you make me want more :D

[V.B.]

"i want to buy their words like petty w****s and make them sound like us" There's a lot I liked about this poem, but I wanted to start here because I thought these lines in particular really stood out in a poem that is pretty consistently good in the first place. Aside from being delightfully original, they are beautifully sinister, and if ever someone needed to put a face on poison, I'd direct them to your poem. Excellent job.

[i.am.the.sun.]

i'm liking this romeo and juliet theme i'm getting from your work. this souned to me like it could be sung rather well actually, especially the last half of it. once again, your word choice is perfect. love this

[Closed Account]

A brutally honest, introspective piece. Powerful wording. evocative and intense.

[SpokenWord]

this is right out there with the best of them, so much truth, honesty and right in our faces too. Loved this poem.

[JelliFyshKissUs]

OOOh, gritty and powerful. Like life, like love, like loss... of sanity. Your twist and tangle of pretty words to describe a grotesque obsession filled with poisonous stings pang me... in a good way. It is unique--something I can only tie to you. And that is why I love it.

[Coyote Poetry]

This is my kind of love story.
"because you are clean, romantic romeo
and i am Juliet's Suicide-"
From the beginning lines. You had me with this outstanding poem. Love can twist us up. Also make us stronger.
Coyote

[Anicca]

Absolutely beautiful. It was almost sinister and I felt a great deal of suspense whilst reading this which I can only class as a good thing. The last line was particularly magical as it showed that you have a lot of insight into the situation. Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful! Thanks for sharing.