if you got to know me..

how could you just leave a part of you

you never got to know

how could you abandon me

and not stay to watch me grow

im sure you would have liked me

and liked the things i do

im sure you would have liked me

just as much as id like you

i never understood why you never came around

it looks like what is lost is never to be found

im sure if you were around things wouldnt be that bad

i wouldnt always be so somber i'd finally have a dad

Reviews

[Brad]

ouch! this one hit me personally. i know how this feels, been there...my own was on the road all the time supposedly "on a business trip", but was actually with some girlfriend...and when he was home, i'd get friendly with his fists...
i can't tell you how much this touched me, the sign of a true poem. damn.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Oh this I can relate too. Great job. That's all I need to say

[Jordan A. Wilson]

this is very touching and well written

[johnnyqueer]

This flows quite nicely.
This seems to be an incredibly personal piece, thanks for sharing it!

[Laura Maidah]

"im sure you would have liked me
and liked the things i do" so true to the tone and speaker's voice. Veritably perfect two lines. Does the speaker like "the you" already? It says id like you, with no apostrophe, I might add. It should be I would. It emphasizes the longing theme of desolation. wouldn't needs an apostrophe too. Both times. THE LAST LINE BLOWS MY HEAD OFF.

[Sean]

A well written poem, extremely expressive, and deeply resounding in terms of anguish and loss.

[...]

This was an intensely emotional piece, dear poet. Intensely emotional for you and for me. My father left me when I was 7. It took me many years to get past that.

[Melody]

very well done. It is indeed intensely emotional. The rhyme is good.

[Wild Willow Blue]

Wow. Intensely emotional.Very well done.

[olla]

nicely done.. it is a good rhyme but I have a beloved that could have written this.. so I am biased..

[Cole Hayley]

very well written. I got to admit it sounds like a catchy song. Very sweet, very true.