if you got to know me..

how could you just leave a part of you

you never got to know

how could you abandon me

and not stay to watch me grow

im sure you would have liked me

and liked the things i do

im sure you would have liked me

just as much as id like you

i never understood why you never came around

it looks like what is lost is never to be found

im sure if you were around things wouldnt be that bad

i wouldnt always be so somber i'd finally have a dad

Reviews

[Brad]

ouch! this one hit me personally. i know how this feels, been there...my own was on the road all the time supposedly "on a business trip", but was actually with some girlfriend...and when he was home, i'd get friendly with his fists...
i can't tell you how much this touched me, the sign of a true poem. damn.

[cynthiabuhainbaello]

Painful and deeply touching, the longings for an absent father that somehow mar the hopes of a young child. The words "it looks like what is lost is never found" is quite true in that beautiful memories of togetherness have never materialized and one wonders what might have been. The poem is touching in its truth, for a every child that missed a relationship with a father (or mother) can never retrieve that from the past. Brilliant composition!

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[allie_arrowz]

aww :( so sad and beautiful.

[eglantine]

:( I'm glad you are able to dissolve your emotions into your words

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

wow, its emotional, and soulful, the poem is just so touching it brings the hidden emotions up and made myself put in your shoes and I was really very touched by the work. Beautiful..

[BLBrown]

Very heartfelt. Your ability to express your emotions is impressive. This is very personal...almost like reading someone's diary. Thanks for sharing and keep writing!!

[Donald Cole]

I love this, one, because i don't know my dad so well, and 2 because i get to be there for my children and to be their dad. Very touching and a beautiful sentiment for something that is sad to many, many kids. Very nice.....
Don

[Shauna Jacqueline Ander..]

Given me shivers. I had a friend a while back that killed herself because her father rejected her...So yea, touched a nerve with that one. Nice work.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

To see my daughter have such a flawless flow with such deep truths so simply put, gives me a sense of humbleness. I am truly blessed to be your mother!

[Southern Cross]

Not only is this poem heartfelt but written with excellent form, rhyme and content. Extremely touched by this ..Big hugs...