if you got to know me..

if you got to know me..

A Poem by destiny_bacardi

how could you just leave a part of you

you never got to know

how could you abandon me

and not stay to watch me grow

im sure you would have liked me

and liked the things i do

im sure you would have liked me

just as much as id like you

i never understood why you never came around

it looks like what is lost is never to be found

im sure if you were around things wouldnt be that bad

i wouldnt always be so somber i'd finally have a dad

© 2012 destiny_bacardi


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ouch! this one hit me personally. i know how this feels, been there...my own was on the road all the time supposedly "on a business trip", but was actually with some girlfriend...and when he was home, i'd get friendly with his fists...
i can't tell you how much this touched me, the sign of a true poem. damn.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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woooh...i really loved this poem...such a great write..;)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very touching poem, emotional with a good rhythm and rhyme. You can tell it comes from the heart, thank you.

Posted 12 Years Ago


That was amazing


Posted 12 Years Ago


that was great

Posted 12 Years Ago


Emotions expressed clearly with clarity that hit the readers heart, great work...

Posted 12 Years Ago


My biological father was mt around when I was 12 my moms husband adopted me. My mom is my real mom amd my dad is every bit my dad. Sometimes it is better is that person isn't there. You never know how much chaos could have been introduced if they were there.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is very emotional. It shows loss and abandonment. I like how the character wonders what would happen with a dad and is exploring the loss.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Simple and special! Great is the write, supreme is the writer!

Posted 12 Years Ago


A very sad poem. To wonder about a father who never shown up leave a open question. One day if you desire. May find out the real reasons? Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


Oh how painful, nice emotions in this write and truth.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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