Waiting

I feel as if I'm waiting

Like your old favorite shirt you haven't worn in awhile

Hoping you'll squeeze me off the hanger that's been holding me back

Waiting for your mood to be just right on a day when you forgot how to match and there was no need to blend any colors

The day you needed a friend and you remember how close I used to hold you

(When shapes don't matter and accessories are just smiles)

On a day where closet doors aren't opened to embrace a masquerade

Or open to hide from the monsters we're to afraid to chase away

(Where comfort is tucked behind a sweater)

And I'm waiting

Waiting for the day when beauty sleep can sleep in and makeup is just a way to make up the time we never spend

But I know I wore out the welcome on your skin, and I couldn't quite fit the season

Now I'm just hanging around

Caught in between yesterday and tomorrow, waiting for the winter to sweep me away

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

What a creative metaphor for being cast aside. Comfortable as a sweater... natural as breathing and sleeping. The last paragraph pounds like a pile driver. There seems to be no hope left except the hope of existing, even if out of sight, hung up, in a dark closet. Thanks for sharing. /Frederick.

[DaniElle LaPointe]

I should read you more often. I forgot how wonderful your work is.

[Sami Khalil]

I really like the metaphor of this poem...Splendid...:)...................

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Great metaphor... We so often "hide" behind clothings, really our entire appearances, and to make this akin to love is quite interesting. "And I'm waiting" -- strong emotional impact in those three little words. Emotional and introspective...I enjoyed this one.

[Blank]

I really love the play on words in this, it's brilliant and so soft and sentimental. There's a genuine sincerity in the voice that comes across as almost patience, and sad acceptance. "Accessories are just smiles" oh love that line. Thank you for sharing, I adored it.

[Derek Nall]

Thank you thank you :) It's so nice when someone else visualizes it and feels it like I try to put it down. Thank you so much :)

[Eddie Phillips]

Again I am struck by your play on words. It is a talent that you use well.

[Derek Nall]

Thank you again sir...sorry for the late response, haven't been in here as much lately.

[Frieda P]

Fascinating write Derek, I love how you use wardrobe and relationships interchangeably...


(When shapes don't matter and accessories are just smiles)

As it should be, we hope that our relationships bring us comfort and don't need all the primping, make- up and accessories to make it work...nicely pen'd.

[Derek Nall]

Thank you :) I kind of wrote this on accident, well I didn't intend for it to turn out the way it did but I just went with it. Felt pretty good. Thanks for the kind words :)