The Day I Died

Some people are masters of manipulation...

Those tears have been mislead, I suggest you keep them in check

Or i'll grow onto you like hands upon necks choking them to death

And the leeches spell my name with blood drawn from veins of your own self loathing

Diagnosing and exposing your counterfeit moaning

I failed to see beyond the horizon but you’ll see my palm prints on the window the day I tried...

The day I died to get through to you...

You can change lanes but you're still going the wrong way

The same way I acknowledge but never learn from my mistake

I just want to stare at your blank page…and fill in the blanks, with thanks…for nothing.

Just a rib cage of broken, singing songs imperfectly spoken

And I declare my last breath to resonate delirious deception

Your falsehood perception...your "f**k you" injection

I failed to read in between the lies 

But you’ll see my blood stains the day I tried…

The day I died to get through to you…

Reviews

[Eddie Phillips]

I have told you before you have a unique way of looking at language. You manipulate phrases but never lose your reader. You did that here and you did it masterfully. I greatly enjoyed this.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

First, I was drawn in by the title...fantastic.

I enjoyed this one on a few different levels. I almost expected something different, but then as I read I began to think that this was the only way that this could have been written...you used raw, gritty, enveloping language that pounded your emotional point into my brain.

I love the line "I failed to read in between the lies" -- nice play on words.

Some people learn from their mistakes, and others continue to repeat them in a cyclical, desperate pattern.

[Frieda P]

Not sure to take this literally or not, either way it smacks you upside the head and drags you to read further, lots of angst and bitterness in this read. "you can change lanes, but you're still going the wrong way'...some people never learn, good read Derek.

[Derek Nall]

Definitely inspired by some angst left inside me about somebody haha. Thanks for the review :)