Kindred Spirits

A sad story

Though Kindred Spirits we are in heart,

our lives must now be lived apart.

Whether or not by choice of will

it's Fates command we must fulfill.

We started off as stranger's do,

hesitant, at something new.

We both were broken way back then

and end up broken once again.

I wanted never to love you much.

So, I used my lies, as a crutch.

To love you then was no concern.

"Love from you? That I can't earn!"

But kind and caring you did show,

and love for you began to grow.

The ice around me it did melt,

and all your troubles I then felt.

I wished to shield you with my arm;

save you from any kind of harm.

No reason, I knew, had you to stay.

Eventually, you'd walk away.

And leave me naught my very best friend.

My heart so broken, never to mend.

But worth it all it was to me!

Hope, I could, my love you'd see.

To do anything for you I certainly would.

Whether it does me harm, or does me good.

So much life we did share,

so much more than I can bare.

Memories will haunt me till

my life is end, my soul is still.

The pain I caused was never meant!

My life for yours I'd have rather spent.

But still I hurt you oh so bad.

All I did was make you sad.

For this I'll pay the highest price;

my heart I'll turn back into ice.

Alone again I shall stand

remembering the first I held your hand.

If only I have seen that day,

as we walked hand-in-hand along the Bay,

Just how perfect and flawless you are.

I'd have run so very far.

My troubles, then, from you I'd spare.

My destructive force to never bare.

You breath on me I'd never feel.

I'd cause no hurt from which to heel.

I'd run so very far away

in hopes we'd meet again someday.

And on that day we met again,

perhaps, your heart I could win.

I should have ran and let you be

left in peace, no worry from me.

The kindest thing that would have been...

if only I had seen it then.

I loved you past, I love you still,

a void I have that none can fill.

Through all this verse I hope to say:

Forgive me, Darling.....this I pray...

for not being there to cherish you....

Just one last day.

Author's Note

This is probably the roughest draft of anything ever. As I've noted before, I am not a poet. This work is just something that hits home very hard for me and I would like to polish it up. I have added very very little punctuation because, quite frankly, I don't know how to punctuate this. I appreciate any and all help. Thank you!!

Reviews

[Tex]

is this what you meant to write for this line "We both we broken way back then"

here is an example of how I am reading it... I will add the commas but you have to tell us where they go, only you can show us how you are reading it.

I wanted never, to love you much
So I used my lies, as a crutch

To love you then, was no concern
"love from you? That I can't earn!"

for an example of an author adding punctuation where no one could have otherwise known see my "Carry You Through" poem. it breaks many rules and requires careful attention to the comas in order to read it as intended. I would also encourage you to use periods. often a poet wants us to read through to the next line with no pause, we can't know if you want that unless you include periods.

Here you did a great job:

No reason, I knew, had you to stay

on this line I would add one here:

Eventually, you'd walk away

Now about the content of the poem... It is wonderful. Honest, authentic, clean, direct. I loved it. It is a great write as only something written straight from the heart can be.

Congratulations on fantastic content. Show us how to read it with commas and periods and you will have a masterpiece on your hands.

This write is so good as it is I gave you 95/100

[Brandon Strickland Erickson]

Thank you so much! You really helped right where I needed it...the punctuation. I'll make the modifications. I really appreciate your input and welcome any more you may have. Thanks!

[Tex]

these were only examples ... i leave the real work up to you... ;-)