Why?

everyon'e favorite question

 

 

Why do I always come back to paper and ink?
Not sure of myself, not sure to think.

    Days long and tedious,
    Tearing at my heart -
        Touching my soul.
    Rendering me helpless,
    Grasping at my fears -
        Taking it’s toll.

Why do I withdraw from society’s constraints?
Humbly avoiding humanity's restraints.

    Nights stretching endlessly,
    Restless my spirit shifts -
        Clawing my thoughts.
    Taking me freely,
    Leaving no shadow unchecked -
        Overwhelmed and besot.

Why do I punish myself over and over again?
Taking to paper and wielding the pen.

    Dreams capture me here,
    Fighting to show me the way -
        Soothing the torment
    Healing my afflictions,
    Sweeping me up on windswept clouds
        Releasing wh’ lies dormant.

To answer the why -
    I shall look inside.
Reflecting and recollecting,
    The what then the why.

Author's Note

Whew! Getting better I hope?

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

why, is a good question to the many things we face in life. I like how this comes together, but most of all I like the ending;

To answer the why -
I shall look inside.
Reflecting and recollecting
Excellent write.

[ice]

Hey D
This reminds me of a universal question...
A profound one word question
The question is why..
and the answer is just as simple;
Yet both are complex-
The answer is Why not?

I would like to see a poem by you, with that title.
I enjoyed reading this..it shows descipline and order..
yet the picture is clear..

Good job....:-)

[TAO]

Sounds like being human to me. I like this piece. It is a reflection of the self, it seems, the wondering of our places, and why we do the things we do to stave off the fires of the hell nipping at our heels like hungry tiger cubs at play and little understand that we are too fragile to be their mates.

As far as getting better, perhaps it's because I'm reading you backwards ( starting from the top). You seem pretty damn good to me.

[akapr17other]

Really interesting format. I likes this:)

[Tommy]

I liked this piece...It tells the story of the muse...I saw that someone told you to change humanity to humanities, but really it should be humanity's, because you are showing a possessive relationship, not a multiple...Or at least that is how I read it...You got it right in the line above with "society's." I still get confused with this stuff....

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[TheFemininePad]

An amazing piece of poetry. I feel feel the raw emotions powering a great piece of writing. I do have one suggestion to offer. The line that reads, "Humbly avoiding humanity restraints." My suggestion is a rewrite to "Humbly avoiding humanities restraints." I didn't look at your review explaining the poem. I always find it better if you didn't explain it out. Each reader should be able to take away a different experience from reading this poem. Every reader has different dreams, ideas, and experiences. Their interpretation will be different. Great poem though.

[Poeticadia]

" Soothing the torment
Healing my afflictions "

That sums up the 'why' of "Taking to paper and wielding the pen." very nicely.

[Angela]

Restlessness does indeed claw the heart. Pen and ink however are not an affliction I believe. They are healing tools and you wield the pen well. The actual placement and dont of the words are a little distracting but thoughts are pure and clear.

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a profound depth to the questions.. to your realizations... There are those moments of reflection that take us deep within ourselves to see who we are.. why we act or react... You make us all look inside more... Powerful...