To Be She

To Be She

A Poem by demureminds

So innocuous she was,

walking on stilts 

she wilts

so harmless.

Her lies they slither

her face she paints

her skin she lathers on

each day.

Her palms stitched from others,

piece by piece together.

She’s a hider she was

and she cried, she cried

each night

because no one saw her.

Her lies became so truthful

And her mask became she

Her skin was now smooth

And her puzzled palms complete.

© 2012 demureminds


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

I liked these lines the best: Her palms stitched from others,

piece by piece together.

I felt more could have been added. You did a fine job of taking us through a journey but still I felt it was incomplete. Just my thoughts.

Good luck for more writes. Cheers!

Posted 12 Years Ago


demureminds

12 Years Ago

Haha no problem, I normally have a problem with my poems being too long, so this was just for simpli.. read more
Divenita Er

12 Years Ago

Sure :)
I like this. It seems to be about those that change for others desperately trying to 'fit' in only to realize themselves. Not sure if this is what you meant, but...
I like the last line- 'her puzzled palms complete'

Posted 12 Years Ago


demureminds

12 Years Ago

Thank you, and yeah that's exactly what I meant
The poem is amazing. Your strong description led the reader into seeing a transformation of a person. Many people will change and can't find their way back to who they are. I like the ending.
"Her lies became so truthful
And her mask became she"
Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


Lovely work

Posted 12 Years Ago



Share This
Email
Facebook
Twitter
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

140 Views
4 Reviews
Rating
Shelved in 2 Libraries
Added on July 5, 2012
Last Updated on July 5, 2012
Tags: me, poetry, personal, she

Author

demureminds
demureminds

San Diego, CA



About
20. California, US. Student: Bio Major. Coffee Enthusiast. Occasional writer. Read if you please. more..

Writing
a1one a1one

A Poem by demureminds



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


More... More...

A Poem by Quill~


RainLover RainLover

A Poem by Xhiljola