You

You

A Story by Bryan A.
"

Written about the girl of my dreams...

"

My heart is pounding harder and harder in my chest, all because you're looking at me.  You smile, and my whole body goes weak.  I want so badly to hold you, to call you mine.  Can you see how much I need you?  Do I really make you happy?  I hope so.  That's all I ever wanted.  I want you to be happy, I want you to smile, I want you to dream, I want you.  That's all there is to it.  I'm not sure I can have you, but I can dream, right?

 

I go to sleep every night, dreaming of you.  Because at least when I dream of you, I'm happy.

 

You make me smile, and I can finally breathe.  Do you see how happy you've made me?  I can smile again.  For once, I feel truly alive.

 

I love you.

 

Do you love me?

© 2009 Bryan A.


Author's Note

Bryan A.
Very rough in my eyes, but this is what was on my mind.

My Review

Would you like to review this Story?
Login | Register




Featured Review

Hmmm...the fact that every review is from a girl who no doubt feels this way about you, or at least something like it, kind of takes away from their words of praise. I hate to be the party-pooper at the fan club you've got going on here, love, but the poem is crap, and "rough" is a nice word for it. People think that you write down how you feel and it's a poem. How many times must I say it?? A poem has to mean something. It is art. It is work and perfection and flowing and uncovering feelings in others. THIS is not a poem. It is a paragraph about high-school lust. And even as that it is not even remotely powerful. If you are not as repulsively self-obsessed as your writing and your picture suggest, send me a message and tell me to get lost. Othere than that- learn to write.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

I really just want all of this gone

Posted 7 Years Ago


honestly I just wish you would take down any writing that had to do with me.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Hmmm...the fact that every review is from a girl who no doubt feels this way about you, or at least something like it, kind of takes away from their words of praise. I hate to be the party-pooper at the fan club you've got going on here, love, but the poem is crap, and "rough" is a nice word for it. People think that you write down how you feel and it's a poem. How many times must I say it?? A poem has to mean something. It is art. It is work and perfection and flowing and uncovering feelings in others. THIS is not a poem. It is a paragraph about high-school lust. And even as that it is not even remotely powerful. If you are not as repulsively self-obsessed as your writing and your picture suggest, send me a message and tell me to get lost. Othere than that- learn to write.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this! it was cute!!

:D

Faith

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Um yea it was good....

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow
this is great
its so emotional and heart-felt
i wish i could write as well as you
awesome :)
-alexis

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awww, very sweet write Bry.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awww B she must love you! Who is this about? I love you!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

is this for someone i know?

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


Share This
Email
Facebook
Twitter
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

469 Views
11 Reviews
Rating
Added on April 28, 2009

Author

Bryan A.
Bryan A.

duh



About
Don't click here! My name is Bryan Alexander Freemon. I'm bored out of my mind, so I figured I'd update my bio. I'm 18 years old, my birthday is January 24. My favorite show is Supernatu.. more..

Writing
On the Run On the Run

A Book by Bryan A.


Run Run

A Chapter by Bryan A.



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Dark Places Dark Places

A Poem by Twilight