Maybe

Maybe

A Poem by Bryan A.

I can feel your heart breaking,

I can hear your breath shaking,

Every word that I say

Cuts you deeper each day.

 

Let me dry your tears,

Let me ease your fears,

I can't handle your pain,

I can't stand it.

 

Let me take your hand,

Let's walk through the sand,

Hear me out,

I can't take it.

 

Tell me how I can fix it,

I have to know,

Tell me how I can heal you,

I need to know.

 

I need you to know what I do is for you,

I want you to know every word is true,

I have to show you...

 

Every cut from this razor,

The deepest pain,

Every drop of my blood

My soul's sad stain.

 

I'm leaving this world tonight,

I'm leaving without you,

I'm leaving this pain behind

Please know I love you.

 

Do you see?

Your name carved into me.

The deepest love I can give,

Eternal scars.

 

Hold me tight,

As long as you can,

Hold me all night,

Take my hand.

 

Can you feel me slipping?

The blood still dripping.

Can you feel me gripping

What's left of my love...

 

Goodbye forever,

Please remember me

Think of me whenever,

And you'll find, there I'll be.

 

I love you.

© 2009 Bryan A.


Author's Note

Bryan A.
No good with endings, just something random I came up with. Tell me what you think.

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I really liked it. I especially liked this part:

"I need you to know what I do is for you
I want you to know every word is true
I have to show you..."

That part is very nice and relates to me somehow...
Well, enough of my rambling. I really liked it and would like to read more of your poems, if that's ok with you... I don't want to bother you with annoying and meaningless reviews...
P.S. The ending was perfect.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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amazing.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That, was beautiful♥

- Kriss

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really enjoyed it. good work with the rhyming. And the ending fit perfectly, it was simple and not over exaggerated. Good job!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

WOH!I lOvE HoW U wRiTe!I wAnTeD tO crY VeRy aWeSoMe!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow lovely poem, so real to the eyes of many of my piers. I thought the ending went well with the poem. very nice!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

OMG that is so beautiful and sad! I can relate to this! This is just a sad romantic piece!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Loving and wanting to help another with results of hurting yourself. Perhaps it was just too much. Either way, your words express themselves without explanation. Good job!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a perfect write.
I love reading it.
I have read it about five time today alone.
the words really speak to me.
great job.

Posted 15 Years Ago


perfect poem
amazing ending
flowed effortlessly
sadness written beautifully
what more can I say :)
-arabella

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

oh my gosh, how heart-wrenching! I love this. beautiful, lyrical rhythm, and a tragic but sweet ending. perfect poem. keep it up.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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