Tricks and ashes

I should leave right now
Got just enough gas to go
And money for the bridge
but I can't leave you like that
Even though I want to
You've been broken
By your father's fists
By bad choices
By cruel lovers
and by the pipe
that keeps you here
in a world of tricks and ashes
Scattered on stained sheets
of semen and blood
Your lungs are coffee black
Your youth has withered away
You're the skin of rotting remains
Who doesn't know to pass away

Reviews

[Corset]

wow that's harsh, but in a way compassionate as hell at the same time, this one seems so very different from the things I've read from you. This speaks to me of drugs and how they can turn a young beautiful person into something unrecognizable. I hope whomever you write about finds hope.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Corset

[Ama May Cooper]

Very intense, very honest and brutal in a way.. but its gentle and loving , affections bound strong despite the detestable thing humans can become.
It is clear in this that you affections are strong, and it is sadly also clear of how much pain and suffering said individual must harbour. Another wonderful piece of work

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you ama may. It's good to hear from you.

[Ama May Cooper]

:) Back to stay i hope

[Rita L. Sev]

Sadly, I know her too... a different style from your pen, but your direct honesty and genuine emotion come through loud and clear.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanks Rita

[Marie]

Well, she made her bed, she's obviously lying in it...but I hope she finds peace.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanks Marie

[Honey-Bee]

Truth be told in this poem in such a horrific way. The life she had to endure, poor girl! I am glad you were a friend if even for a moment. I hope things get better for her. Wow!

[Baby Ricochet]

You and me both

[A. Amos]

This one was straight from your heart...enjoyed the read!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you amos

[Frieda P]

I love when you expose your soft pink underbelly Mark, you know how affecting this is, there really are no words to articulate the angst and brutal pains that this one conjures up...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you frieda