Sarin Dripping Skies

A nursery rhyme

         Sarin dripping skies
    Phosphoric clouds float by
   Choking lungs bleeding gums
     and blinding burning eyes
 Death sings her tortured melodies
       of genocidal tragedies
 one last breath of sudden death
     and all the children die 

Author's Note

Sarin is a chemical agent
Phosphorus is highly flammable

Reviews

[Dye]

Quite the impact in so few words. Nicely done.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Dye

[Keith]

The excellent rhyming scheme makes this comment on the Syrian atrocity stick in our brain. Excellent rhyme makes the message far more poignant and memorable, as this one needs to be.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Keith

[icelandicblue]

I remember Sarin was used in the Japanese subway system. We should all be outraged and focused on the use of chemical weapons in Syria. It is a horrible and cowardly thing to do. The world better sit up and take notice instead of hiding behind the potential cost of oil if we act. We don't even get the majority of our oil from the middle east anymore anyway. As an aside, what is up with Russia? This is a timely write and a public service. You are always on the cutting edge.

[Baby Ricochet]

Putin's a two bit thug is what's up with Russia. Thank you Blue

[icelandicblue]

That is very true. The Family Guy did a hysterical parody of him.

[icelandicblue]

Additionally what is even more alarming is that Assad is a medically trained doctor. Sounds more like Dr. Mengle.

[Cassie]

This is nice nice nice....loved it BR

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you Cassie

[Joyce S. Greene]

Just horrific and unconscionable! A poem defining the ultimate in evil. Strongly worded and charged with emotion, your poem is a call to men of good will to eradicate the villains who would inflict unbelievable pain and death on others, including very young children.

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you Joyce

[Tom]

Man's inhumanity to man! (and even little children) A stark, poignant poem but regrettably it's a fact!

Well penned Rico and kudos to you for highlighting such issues, sadly we don't live in a world were it's all love & romance !

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you Tom

[emmajoy]

When Christ said, 'Suffer the little children to come unto me', He certainly didn't mean it in that evil and excrutiatingly painful way. Thank you for putting your heart into this post, it's special in more than a literary way.

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you Emma

[Brittney]

A horrifically eye opening nursery rhyme at that. Well penned, very interesting. I could see this being the inspiration of a horror movie/story. Well done

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you brittney

[Pryde Foltz]

Stuff of true horror movies. Yes, let's get pissed about something worth getting pissed about. Bravo.

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you pryde

[Will]

Was this inspired by recent events in Syria, Mark? Because that's what immediately came to my mind, as both sarin and phosphorous have been used there, according to reports.

As for this nursery rhyme, I like it. A unique rhyme scheme and format that flows nicely, and I did find myself reading it in my head like lyrics to a familiar song. Nicely done, my friend.

[Baby Ricochet]

Syria's use of Chemical agents was the inspiration. Something we need to remember when the US starts firing cruise missiles next week. Thank you Will