Dream Girl Tanka

I know they're not suppose to rhyme. I'm a visionary

       Dream without a care
       Of a lass of virtue fair
        With all of that said
    I'll take a stripper instead
So long as she's bare down there

Author's Note

I know. I'm an objectifying neanderthal. But I own it.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

I love this. So clever. So funny. Glad I saw it in the feed.

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you KL

[Eric Pudalov]

HAHA, Ricochet! I see what you meant about your sexy poems being funny - this is no exception. I don't remember what the format of a tanka is supposed to be, but I don't care if it rhymes. That really works for this poem!

I've done the strip club thing, but the newness of it wore off quite awhile ago. You ever get a stripper to go out with you? Well, I'm taken anyway, so it doesn't matter now. Great poem, again!!

[Baby Ricochet]

Yes I have dated a stripper before but I didn't meet her where she worked. I met her at A BBQ on the beach. Off that stage strippers are just chicks with problems.

[Blue Ivory]

Hahahaha you're poetry always makes me laugh xD I really like your honesty.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you siren

[Annie]

I don't see why there are so many negative or shocked comments. Personally, I think that poetry, whether abrasive or affronting, is merely a reflection of what is in your soul. So if this is what is in your soul, then good job!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you annie

[ANTO]

Still anti-Naturelle BR? One day you might have a Euro-piphany lol
You DO OWN IT though - bigtime !!

[Baby Ricochet]

Lol! Thank you ANTO

[dw817]

⊰ℛℛ⊱
To be sure a woman would blush to her fingers' ends at the very idea of appearing publicly stark naked; but education and prejudice are everything, since it is an axiom, that where there is no feeling of self-reproach, there can assuredly be no shame. -- J. G. Stedman

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanks for stopping by dw

[Baby Ricochet]

You know this piece made #1 on the popular reading list? So did Slaughterhouse dreams. It's enough to make you think, oh, I don't know, my readers like to have a good laugh and can relate to being trapped in a low paying job they hate.

[dw817]

I've made the popular reading list before, big brother. The problem with fame is, it is an empty purse. Spend it and go broke, eat it and go hungry, seek it and go mad, and - umm - in the case of this writing - make love to it and get rug burn ? :)

[Baby Ricochet]

I write to entertain. I use the pop list to see how good a particular type of poetry does vs another type. Combined with reviews helps me decide what to write. I wrote this in about 90 seconds. Read out loud the flow is limerick in style which works well with raunchy humor. (There once was a girl from nantuckit) This piece was a good combination and my readers loved it. I threw the objectifying Neanderthal part in because it worked as a last giggle. Obviously I didn't know how well this piece would do. I was confident in Slaughterhouse dreams because the piece is a poets poem. A metaphorical piece making a statement about a current situation most people can relate to. The violent imagery made it edgy and Ricochet. My readers expect me to push the envelope and I don't want to let them down. Sometimes I go to far, like "Little Wigger" or "Little Eve" and even they got great reviews from most of the folks that read all my work, I don't know what to write next. It'll strike me I'm sure. Eventually I'm going to write a novel but I've got tons of books to read first, courses to take and keep sharpening my skills on the WC however I do. Thanks Little bro.

[dw817]

Notoriety will always be appreciated by the general masses. Reach for the stars if you must, I only ask you don't paint them all black lest I need them to see by. :)

[Sam Sin Sepultura]

I laughed, not gunna lie. I don't think it's that badly objectifying.

[Baby Ricochet]

I don't either. Thank you Sam

[Sam Sin Sepultura]

No problem, hopefully others find it just as humorous.

[Baby Ricochet]

Well, some people have a perpetual stick lodged up their a*s. There's sweet FA I can do about it so I just do what I do

[Sam Sin Sepultura]

They all need to shove it, write whatever you want. It can be the most offensive thing on the face of the planet, but if it's your expression, don't keep it so easily tied down.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Haha...you are ever the clever one. You should write a book of lymmericks...would be very fun :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Ha! Maybe so. Thank you

[TL Boehm]

as long as she's bare down there. too funny

[Baby Ricochet]

Lol! Thank you