Traffic jam Senryu

Trapped in the traffic
Of a high way accident
Time crawls like dead snakes

Reviews

[s y e]

Ugh! I hate traffic jams, dont even get me started on them! UGH! UGH! Suckaroonies!

~ Noodle.

[Baby Ricochet]

They are a buzz kill

[dw817]

Better that than a scree-ee-ee-ech ! *WHAM !* *Crunch* *SMASH* *glass breaking* *Yelling* *sounds of police cars*

I would MUCH rather be in traffic driving by an accident rather than BE the accident !

[Baby Ricochet]

That's for sure

[Keith]

Love that last line, dead accurate.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Keith

[Will]

"Crawls like dead snakes"' is a very accurate way to describe traffic, especially in my good ole home, NYC. You hit the nail on the head with good execution and good simile. Nicely done.

[Baby Ricochet]

I swear the taxi drivers in Manhatten try to hit pedestrians.

[Will]

They don't; that's the scary part. If they were trying, they would kill for sure

[Annabelle Lee]

Time crawls like dead snakes
Not sure why I find that so funny. MAybe it's the fact that snakes can't crawl
Or maybe it's the fact that since it's dead it can't even move

I will go with the first option haha..... gives me funny pictures in my head

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you annabelle

[ANTO]

Just think though BR - if it werent for this traffic jam, you wouldn't have had a visit from your muse and susequently not have written this fine senryu.
Glass half full - as long as its whisky...lol

[Baby Ricochet]

Lol! Thank you anto

[Rita L. Sev]

Ugh. That sucks. But that last line is gold!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you rita

[Salar Majak]

welcome back from writer's block ;)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you aurora

[Mark]

lolol being a truck driver, I've been there. got stuck at a standstill 4 hours once when a big rig rolled over. 'time crawls like dead snakes' ROFL line of gold that one is.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you mark

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you mark

[Marie]

Just be glad you ween't part of the accident...

[Baby Ricochet]

For sure. Thank you