Chain Verse Poem

Just screwing around

I chased you with a lawnmower
The mower of my past
My past is full of diesel fuel
You spilled on the grass
The grass turned some weird a*s color
The color of my pain
My pain is in my a*s right now
God you drive me insane
Is sanity something we all lose
when losers come around
She was round like a meaty Zeppelin
that got to close to the ground
The ground that's covered in diesel fuel
you spilled you little fool
The fool is in a deck of cards
What will I do with you

Reviews

[Eddie Phillips]

Nice, and still just a bit funny.

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you eddie

[dw817]

Rico, if a girl you are in love with is giving you a pain in the a*s, you're doing it wrong ! :D

[Baby Ricochet]

Lol! Thanks dw

[Rene Velez]

interesting concept, works well here.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Rene

[saratogaparty]

ha! I love this. It's amazing what you can make those little words do.

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you Saratoga

[Luke Rawlings]

Bravo on this piece, it is refreshing and defintely original. Love the line "Is sanity something we all lose
/when losers come around". Well done! :D

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you luke

[Jo Todd]

I really liked this, nice to see something original and made me giggle. good work

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you jo

[Tai Ryens]

Is it odd that I can almost see myself reciting this to my future children?

[Baby Ricochet]

LMAO! Thanks Tai

[ANTO]

'Just screwing around' - you make it look easy BR. I never encountered the chain verse form before, thanks for the education my friend.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you ANTO

[TL Boehm]

I so enjoy a quirky poem - its almost like a stream of conciousness write - one word or phrase a jumping off point to the next. Well done.
My pain is in my a*s right now - that made me laugh

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you TL