Ice House of Broken Gears

     My body's bloated on the tide
           Rivers of bloody tears
  My lungs are choking on Chloride
       Ice house of broken gears

     Push my body to the marrow
         Expending all my years
     Living lies with no tomorrow
     Ice house of broken gears

   Broken down to a credit score
        What life means to me 
I'm nothing but a paycheck w***e
        This life is failing me

 Constructing damaged alternates
       Running on angry fears
    Frustration always incubates
    Ice house of broken gears

  Thrown to corrupted legal men
           A jury of my peers
    Prosecutors unleashed again
     Ice house of broken gears

   Dragged into a broken system
     designed to make me pay
     Turning me into a victim
    They took my pride away

  Always running the tilt a whirl
   Sick clowns with ugly leers
 Watching life sink down a swirl
   Ice house of broken gears

Reviews

[Lady Ra]

Great poem. There was a wonderful lecture by a woman named Dr. Clarissa Pinkola Estes - the lecture was called "The Boy Who Married an Eagle." In the lecture she speaks about how men are treated in this culture as if they do not feel, but men have all kinds of feelings; all kinds of hopes and dreams. Men in this culture are taught to work themselves to the grave. And now women are too in addition to raising children. This is a marvelous poem. Very brave and eloquent.

Ra

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Lady Ra. I appreciate your input.

[Rita L. Sev]

Well done illustration of the frustration of living day to day in an unbalanced world. I like your use of repetition - mirrors the fact that the same frustrations haunt us repeatedly. Good one!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thsnk you Rita

[Zelle]

it has effusion of emotions and is very vivid! a fab verse indeed! :)

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you Zelle

[KAOlmsted]

Even without the description line, it is beyond obvious this piece is about frustration, Baby...you absolutely nailed that emotion in this creative write. I am gobsmack. This is truly one of your finest pieces to date. The repetition of the title reminded me of something I can't quite put my finger on, and I'm okay with that...I don't need to analyze it to death *laugh* I'm just saying...it reminded me of something I'm fairly certain I like...poor senile kimmer ;-) 100/100, obviously... xoxo

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Kimmer

[KAOlmsted]

Always my pleasure, Mark...

[Pete Langley]

I applaud you, man. You turned what could have been a scream of frustration into an excellent piece of art. Well constructed. P.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Pete

[Commanda Panda]

This is something any working class person should be able to relate to. It hits home and makes a person empathize. The system is broken, the people are broken, and it's all a big hamster wheel of doom.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reading Commanda Panda. I appreciate you stopping by.

[Commanda Panda]

I appreciate good poetry. Keep it up!

[Rhea752]

Nicely written and full of emotion. Another awesome write!! Keep it up :D

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Rhea

[Steven]

Sophisticated. Guess you can do that too. Loved the sick energy in this.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Steven

[Steven]

No this is actually fckn great, dude.

[quinfinn]

dude, this is awesome! so much truth and with such profundity....another stellar write from the deeper side of baby ricochet!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Quinfinn

[quinfinn]

yep!