Ice House of Broken Gears

     My body's bloated on the tide
           Rivers of bloody tears
  My lungs are choking on Chloride
       Ice house of broken gears

     Push my body to the marrow
         Expending all my years
     Living lies with no tomorrow
     Ice house of broken gears

   Broken down to a credit score
        What life means to me 
I'm nothing but a paycheck w***e
        This life is failing me

 Constructing damaged alternates
       Running on angry fears
    Frustration always incubates
    Ice house of broken gears

  Thrown to corrupted legal men
           A jury of my peers
    Prosecutors unleashed again
     Ice house of broken gears

   Dragged into a broken system
     designed to make me pay
     Turning me into a victim
    They took my pride away

  Always running the tilt a whirl
   Sick clowns with ugly leers
 Watching life sink down a swirl
   Ice house of broken gears

Reviews

[Lady Ra]

Great poem. There was a wonderful lecture by a woman named Dr. Clarissa Pinkola Estes - the lecture was called "The Boy Who Married an Eagle." In the lecture she speaks about how men are treated in this culture as if they do not feel, but men have all kinds of feelings; all kinds of hopes and dreams. Men in this culture are taught to work themselves to the grave. And now women are too in addition to raising children. This is a marvelous poem. Very brave and eloquent.

Ra

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Lady Ra. I appreciate your input.

[Zap-the-awesome]

That was awesome. Seriously. My favorite of yours so far. It just had a nice setup and how it always ended with the same line.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Zap

[Angel]

I read somewhere that Mahatma Ghandhi had said of Christianity, "I like your Christ, but I don't like your Christians. Your Christians are so unlike your Christ"...(at may not be an exact quote) I thought, "how said, that he got close enough to Christ to "like" Him, but let himself be pushed away by His followers."
I like what you've done here, Baby Ricochet, and you have said what I was trying to say, only you put it so much better than I did.
But, please...don't get close enough to Christ to realize that He is Someone you can "like"...but then let a bunch of silly "sheep" push you away.
Think of it this way...if you are following a crowd, you are going in the wrong direction...

You know I had to peek at this after reading your review of my "Memo"...but, as I said, you said it soooo much better than I.
Christian, take warning!!
Great job!!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Angel

[Nix]

What an amazing depiction of our broken system. Very powerful, amazingly crafted, and very creative. You have just raised your bar of excellence again. This is the kind of poem that can spark a revolution. Amazing work.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you N.B.

[Cleide Tatyana Almeida]

Sad and oh so relateable. Well written. I enjoyed this!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Cleide

[Vikrantsingh]

Buddy you simply left me speechless what an amazing piece of work this is.
Just loved it Ricochet
Keep up the great work :)

Cheers!
Singh :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you singh

[Keith]

Amazing flow, great read with a social comment. Love it!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Keith

[Tarushi]

Wow this is an amazing piece of poetry. Reading it , one can really feel the poem. well done! :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Tarushi

[SoulSplatter]

Wow this really speaks to me. I feel this every day. I really love the lines
"
Broken down to a credit score
What life means to me
Nothing but a paycheck w***e
This life is failing me "

Amazing write. Thank you for sharing this!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Soul

[Tate Morgan]

You are getting better every time.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Tate. I appreciate that

[a j mensah]

nice!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A compounding statment that grabs the reader and doesn't let go, well done, good read.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Thomas