Ice House of Broken Gears

     My body's bloated on the tide
           Rivers of bloody tears
  My lungs are choking on Chloride
       Ice house of broken gears

     Push my body to the marrow
         Expending all my years
     Living lies with no tomorrow
     Ice house of broken gears

   Broken down to a credit score
        What life means to me 
I'm nothing but a paycheck w***e
        This life is failing me

 Constructing damaged alternates
       Running on angry fears
    Frustration always incubates
    Ice house of broken gears

  Thrown to corrupted legal men
           A jury of my peers
    Prosecutors unleashed again
     Ice house of broken gears

   Dragged into a broken system
     designed to make me pay
     Turning me into a victim
    They took my pride away

  Always running the tilt a whirl
   Sick clowns with ugly leers
 Watching life sink down a swirl
   Ice house of broken gears

Reviews

[Lady Ra]

Great poem. There was a wonderful lecture by a woman named Dr. Clarissa Pinkola Estes - the lecture was called "The Boy Who Married an Eagle." In the lecture she speaks about how men are treated in this culture as if they do not feel, but men have all kinds of feelings; all kinds of hopes and dreams. Men in this culture are taught to work themselves to the grave. And now women are too in addition to raising children. This is a marvelous poem. Very brave and eloquent.

Ra

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Lady Ra. I appreciate your input.

[rhythm&blues]

Lots of frustration and angst in this one, not what I'm used to reading from your pen. Good read nonetheless.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you R&B

[Claire Barsett]

Wow. If I could start a slow clap, it would be after hearing you read this. Nicely done!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Claire.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Cool. cynical, broken and full of pain.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reading carolannn

[Carolann Dowsett]

My pleasure

[Troy Henson]

Great write. Demonstrating our own self worth is so hard. At the end of the day who are we trying to please?? Our thouughts and feelings are what make us who we are. Others should respect that.
Great powerful emaotion in this piece.

Regards
Troy

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you troy

[Shane Winchester]

Always running the tilt a whirl
Sick clowns with ugly leers
Watching life sink down a swirl
Ice house of broken gears

I like these lines in particular. Great rhyme scheme and flow to the poem as well.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Shane

[Sirius King]

Broken down to a credit score
What life means to me
I'm nothing but a paycheck w***e
This life is failing me

this on hit me in the throat

Awesome write man!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Serenus. It's one of my best for sure.

[Sirius King]

i agree!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Daniel Eckert]

A great poem. I love the paycheck w***e idea. Amusing and so true! Plus what a great rhyme scheem you keep all the way through.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Daniel

[ANTO]

Broken down to a credit score
What life means to me
I'm nothing but a paycheck w***e
This life is failing me

Its often not a great result when we examine our lot BR but your writing talent is a gift and one you use well, take solace in that.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you sir. I appreciate your input

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I really like this poem. It is full of such raw emotion. The first and last stanzas have the most chilling words and imagery.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Cascara.

[Jack V.]

Harsh outlook on life. I liked it though. Thanks for the good write-up.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Jack

[Jack V.]

You like grit don't you?