Circus of discontent

Precious words I'd been looking for
I never seem to find
Slip through the shattered window
The filters of my mind

Stumbling around in the darkness
Like a broken Dinosaur
Tripping on my own indifference
Pinned down by old armor

It never really occurred to me
How far I'd have to go
To pack away my memories
From moments long ago

Looking for the right warm rectum
In a fun house full of sin
A merry go round going nowhere
A new ride to begin

Ferris wheel Zippers go spinning
Rods and gears tumbling down
Wasted on crack w***e drippings
It eats black holes in the ground

Shoveling rock into memory holes
Coping with blighted thoughts
Lured away by a black vagina
The best vice I ever bought

But all of it turned to nothing
I was left all alone
A monument to self absorption
Eating my own tail bone

Now Protected by commitment
I sit up in the bleachers
To watch the circus of discontent
My demon's favorite teacher

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

Start with What a Flipper of an image.
Ah and what a write. The piece it self breathes and seethes of the discontent found within your closing content. Man this has got to be a favorite of mine by far as your work, and general work of the site. You often get me to laugh or even anger, but oh this time, the thoughts and the mental imagery. The concept attached to picture. Man the feel of an evil circus or big top event. I often find the things we least wish to think of the one's deserving of the most attention, even if only to question why it is the back drop and shadow to every single good willed person. This piece in true artistic fashion is a fun Ideaology within metaphor for me. Can't say I have the skill nor want to critique this, it's pure ART and I love it.
It would be great if I could place it in my library favorites please, Ricochet?

"Shoveling rock into memory holes
Coping with blighted thoughts
Lured away by a black vagina
The best vice I ever bought "
Slap crazy good skit friend. I mean really. I would like this to be my next featured piece and you the featured artist again, what say you chap?
Sincerely
Christopher G. S.
110/100 - seriously wish I could.

[Baby Ricochet]

I'd be honored. Thank you unsavable soul.

[unsavable_soul]

Just saw The Bully piece during my contest submissions, you hadn't entered it but I wish you had. I happened upon it while looking through various related material. I use a slight mathematical system to contest. I think it keeps it fair. Any how I am ever appreciative of you sir.
Sincerely
Christopher

[Baby Ricochet]

I entered it in someone's contest. I'm not sure who's. I don't enter contests to much. By the time I notice them they're already over.

[unsavable_soul]

I hear you, our loss one that one trust me.

[Corset]

Clowns are so freakin creepy, the line about rectums was kinda ew as well, Demons love to hear themselves talk, and that's exactly what this is , a huge top tent in a big overblown circus, and they don't even bother with committment anymore, more and more, inch by inch, we are loosing the grip between.

[Corset]

your poem is awesome though, I wanted to make you sure didn't take my review out of context, The circus is the farce of the inhabitants of this panet.

[Rene Velez]

this is comical and intriguing at the same time, there is depth, well done.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Rene

[Tai Ryens]

Yet another hilarious poem! Keep it up, Baby R!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Tai

[Trigorin]

Good concept, but I feel like there's a lot of filler in this piece. It seems like you could have gotten the same message across in half the space and, by drawing this out for so long, you lose the audience near the end. Some of your imagery is a little crass, but overall you do manage to raise some valid points, so good work there.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Trigorin

[BlueDreams]

Its a breathtaking piece of artistic write :) I literally read it thrice,i am amazed by emotions depicted in here, Keep it up :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Swapz

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

realization is a first in the art of fine-tuning the sacredness of the self
the rest follows...eventually...automatically

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you poetry kiddo

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

aye aye Sarge

[The Girl That Let You G..]

I mean this is...INCREDIBLE!
This has to be my second favourtie write by you Baby. Slendid work.
It was dark, and intriqing, and I love the reference to the Circus.
Nice one Sir

[Baby Ricochet]

Why thank you girl. I'm pleased you enjoyed it.

[KAOlmsted]

I could have sworn I reviewed this, but I don't see it. Oh well...

This is truly an amazing piece, Mark...the imagery, the brutal honesty, it is what poetry is all about. Well done.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Kimmer

[KAOlmsted]

Of course...

[Vikrantsingh]

I Love Joker, this poem just took me back - Dark Knight! (Movie)
Well sometimes Jokers are scary. I loved you poem every single expound.
"Stumbling around in the darkness
Like a broken Dinosaur"
"Ferris wheel Zippers go spinning
Rods and gears tumbling down"

I felt so much like i'm expressing it and feeling it :)

Cheers!!
Singh :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Singh

[Sirius King]

great flow,
dark, murky imagery


this is really good.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Serenus