The Poet

A quick write for s***s and giggles

 
I licked the hand rail on the bus
           I wanted a disease
    I wanted to suffer for my art
    Van Gogh move over please

  I want choking lungs of leprosy
      or at least some old TB
I want to shake my fist and shout
          Art did this to me

I want to be the suffering poet
        no one understands
I want to write tortured verses
      with my genius hands

I want to write romantic sonnets
     to chicks I'll never bone
I want to sit at home all night
       Miserable and alone

I want to stand around and brood
           Looking suicidal
I want to quote old Oscar Wilde
           as my only idol

  I want to get beat up every day
            for not fitting in
  I want to wear it on my sleeve
           extra long and thin

 You better tell me I'm sensitive bitch
             or I'll kick your a*s
So I'll just pound my key board now
       and let the roid rage pass

F**k this man I'm hitting the weights
            I am just who I am
 Love me hate me want to kill me
           I don't give a damn

Author's Note

Yes I know leprosy isn't a lung disease but it's the best line in the poem.
The dude in the photo is Morrissey. Former Vocalist for The Smiths, brilliant solo artist and voice of the lonely, miserable and disenfranchised everywhere. He's really funny at times too. Why Morrissey for this? Fuck, I don't know. I just really like Morrissey.

Reviews

[Will]

Great work, Richochet. Simple but effective rhyme scheme combined with your dry sense of humor and your brilliant metaphors and allusions make this poem great. I really like it. One quick grammar catch: in the poem, use "idol" rather than "idle." other than that, you've got a great piece.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Will. I did change it to Idol.

[RachelReaper]

Tortured? Not my thing, I'd rather keep that internalized and not even write it... I think if I did it would scare the living hell out of people what goes on in my mind. The message in your poem is strong at the end.

[Baby Ricochet]

I'm not to crazy about the last Stanza but I was literally about to go to the gym when I wrote it and that's what popped into my head.

[RachelReaper]

The only gym I've ever been to is a pokemon gym on my GameBoy XD I don't count the karate dojo as one.

[Corset]

lol, is idle suppose to be idle or Idol? is roid suppose to be roid or road, after that 'tis highly , I repeat, highly entertaining! My sides hurt. haha

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Corset. I fixed Idol, roid is roid

[Corset]

k..awesome it's still awesome!

[Ency Bearis]

Wow this is wonderful, damn wonderful men, well expressed and poetized.
Can I suggest ? I know and you know that leprosy isn't not a lung disease, but you want to use it to fit in. What about this phrase - I want that nerve wrecking leprosy -
Leprosy is a disease that damage the nerves and skin, or neurologically caused by Mycobacterium Leprae, the same family bacteria that cause the disease of TB or tubercolusis - Mycobacterium Tubercolis. Just to make it with significance. Is this okay for you ?

[Ency Bearis]

Sorry for the typo error - I mean - Mycobacterium Tubercolusis.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for stopping by my learned friend.

[Ency Bearis]

My pleasure, you're welcome Baby Ricochet

[KAOlmsted]

This is pure gold. You never cease to amaze me, Mark. Pure f*****g gold. Now go hit the weights ;-)

[Baby Ricochet]

I did. Thank you Kimmer

[KAOlmsted]

Course you did ;-) Always my pleasure.

[Jack...]

I found myself laughing through this piece until I got to the end and thought, S**t, maybe I shouldn't be laughing. Nice one my friend.

[Baby Ricochet]

Ha! Thanks Jack

[Angel]

This is one of those pieces that makes me go "hmmmm"...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Angel

[Angel]

Ahhh...the suffering Artist! I am humbled that he speaks to me!!
You are so very welcome, sir.
And thank you for making me smile!!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A highly emotional and challenging piece that negates the rapids of ones mind when pondering on your use of descriptive wording, well done.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Thomas

[quinfinn]

BR is both sensitive and at the same time full of piss and vinegar. this makes for a lethal combination of both beautiful and sensitive verse and the ridiculously witty. dude, you gotta stop licking those bus rails, it's not good for you and you have no idea where they've been! awesome write!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanks bro. Love the new avatar

[quinfinn]

you're welcome, ricochet....and thanks!