I got the idea for this piece from the book "Economic Hit Man" by John Perkins. A book about exploiting developing nations that makes you want to start lighting s**t on fire after you read it.
If I were a gun runner or a weapons profiteer I'd build a solid legacy A monument of tears
I'd arm the peasant class Pay them rice and bread Play them off each other Until everyone was dead
Take their land away Drain them dusty dry Starve them into misery Let their children die
Murder the intelligent Exploit the ignorant Prey upon their petty fears like a genocidal tyrant
Keep them buried into debt so their economy is broken Give them crony leadership That's nothing but a token
Import labor to their land Make them slaves to industry Ruthlessly exploit them and not pay them anything
Poison their environment Pour sewage in their wells Taint the air with chemicals So disease infects their cells
So they die by tens of thousands Lots more where they came from I'll Start another resource war and blame it on Islam
It's a game of chess you see with subhumans of a nation A surplus mass of indigents meant for blatant exploitation
From the USA to Africa All across these fertile lands You're all just faceless peasants who played into my hands
Interesting . . . I've heard it said by police officers that most corporate execs and powerful big-shots on Wall Street and other powerful businessmen have the psych profile of a psychopath, because it takes sheer ruthlessness and a lack of conscience to get that much power and keep it . . . like Balzac said (I think) : "Behind every great fortune there is a crime"
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
I read a book about psychopathic personality disorder that made the same claim. It was an interestin.. read moreI read a book about psychopathic personality disorder that made the same claim. It was an interesting book for sure.
you're beginning to remind me of one of my favorite 1960s folk singer/songwriters... phil ochs. if you're not familiar with him, look him up. he wrote scathing protest songs. his talent rivaled dylan, but he was much more political. i almost wish there was a tune to go along with this poem.
i caught the cambodian reference in that one verse. too few people know about the horrors of pol pot's regime.
as far as critiquing the poem itself... two things. the rhythm and rhyme sometimes seem forced. for instance 'buried into debt' makes the rhythm work in that line, but it sounds wrong. my other criticism would be that maybe your view should be narrowed. this is like a shotgun hitting all kinds of targets with scattered shots. i'd like to see more surgical strikes.
that's it. keep writing.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you bob. I appreciate it
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For a piece that is so politically charged, the words rolled off the tongue so easily it almost felt wrong.
I try to always leave atleast one thing to improve on or think about in all my feedback so here's yours! =p
It read at a really smooth rhythm, but there was a spot or two where I paused because it veered a little bit from the structure of the rest..
ie:
"Murder the intelligent
Exploit the ignorant
Prey upon their petty fears
like a genocidal tyrant "
The wording of that last line just felt a little bit awkward to me...
Nitpicking, I know... but I feel these things serve people better than just praise =]
Good job here, I really enjoyed it
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
I had Cambodia and the Khmer Rouge in mind for that Stanza and I do agree the meter is off. I need .. read more I had Cambodia and the Khmer Rouge in mind for that Stanza and I do agree the meter is off. I need to tweak it. Thank you for your review. appreciate your input.
Very strong write! Well done!
Somewhere, there is one who sits and ponders on how he can do this to America. How rich and strong he will be... if/when he succeeds. (A possible Tom Clancy-like novel.)
Structurally sound with a good rhythm and flow; the message within gave me pause...which always leads to thinking. Excellent work. This should be your feature. It is that amazeballs.
Oh so true. Cheny lol well Theres a man born pissed off.But I guess better to be pissed off than pissed on
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
In my opinion Cheney is a clinical psychopath. Born to succeed at whatever he does with absolutely n.. read moreIn my opinion Cheney is a clinical psychopath. Born to succeed at whatever he does with absolutely no compassion or empathy for others. Thanks for stopping by Tate.
11 Years Ago
Cheney has no compassion for his fellow man He is a steam roller who mows the grass so to speak wipi.. read moreCheney has no compassion for his fellow man He is a steam roller who mows the grass so to speak wiping out everything in his way
This is a perfect versification of the truth. USA is one of the GR8 places to be ... democracy is a great concept... so is religion.... the trouble is they have all been requisitioned by the legal section of the accountants " Power, Greed and Corruption".
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