Random Ricochets

Yes there's swearing

Sitting in the parking lot
Jesus Christ it's cold
I Don't want out this truck
I must be getting old

Eying a girl in skinny jeans
Denim jacket pointy boots
admiring the girlie sway
of her beautiful caboose

When I'm out with my girl
I tone that s**t right down
She knows how I picked her up
and don't like me lookin around

Leaves are blowing wind is cutting
I'm a soft civilian man
It was cold as Medusa's tits
When I was in Afghanistan

We lived in plywood hooches
Without heat or electricity
and went on stupid long patrols
to peak our misery

I hated that f*****g deployment 
It was the low point of my life
We were bored and miserable
and I had a brand new wife

The honeymoon was over
When I got that call
Ricochet report to base
I almost went AWOL

I gotta move my a*s now
and go inside that store
I gotta pick up sweetener
Life is full of stupid chores

Reviews

[Monster ^.^]

Well, for some random stuff, it tells an almost full story! No one wants to be out there in the cold, and damn you are right in your points!!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you monster

[Monster ^.^]

It's funny when people call me that.. maybe I should change it. HAHA

[Baby Ricochet]

Monster is a cool avatar name.

[Monster ^.^]

Hahaha. Okay then. I'll take your word for it.

[Pete Langley]

This poem says a helluva lot, Ric.
The continuous tension of living and surviving in a completely alien place is the most daunting experience anyone can endure - even once returned to so-called normality.
Maybe the mundane `stupid chores ` are our sanctuary and comfort - or counterbalance. We all need sweeteners. Nice piece, man. P.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you pete

[saratogaparty]

I swear, I yawned at the end, not because it was bad, but because it was good. I imagined you yawning, which, in turn made me yawn, because even though you weren't actually yawning I could see it and it's contagious.

So...good job!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Saratoga.

[Annabelle Lee]

haha I was.actually excited to see I had a RR and even more so that it was Ricochet! Always good for a laugh.... is it okay I laughed? I know deployments not a funny thing but colder than medusa's tits and the ending cracked me up. I could look for meaning that isnt there but that just doesnt fit with your straight to the point works. Bravo, as usual.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Annabelle