Girlfriend in the shower

My girlfriend's in the shower
She'll take about an hour
I'll f**k around with my phone
See if anyone's home
Check up on writerscafe
What crap got posted today
Some RRs in my box
Review them maybe not
Some of them are good
Some just never should
Every jerkoff's a critic
Reviews that are acidic
Ricochet's flip remarks
That dipshit's just all bark
He doesn't have the bite
He doesn't know how to write
These rhymes just f*****g blow
And he doesn't seem to know
She turned her hair drier on
So I'll say so long
God what a crappy poem
Maybe I'll write zen koans

Reviews

[James William Dyer]

I like the subject matter, you personalized the mundane. I don't think the poem is crappy, but i'd leave that line in there. my only criticism would be some of the lines dont fit the rhythm of the rest of the poem.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanks. I pulled it out of my a*s in about ten minutes and posted it on a phone lying on a hotel bad with Shindlers list on the TV. I really don't like that movie

[Michael G.]

Sometimes life can only offer fillers. Moments when you are left to your own amusement... and writing.
You filled the time writing this, and I filled mine reading it. LOL!

[Baby Ricochet]

Ha! Thanks for stopping by Mr G

[AYVID N]

Nice. Learning to wait...sign of a good boyfriend :)

[Baby Ricochet]

It is for sure.

[AYVID N]

:)))))

[Ohhhwillow]

This was very amusing, I too expected a hot and intense poem but was impressed by your exploration of the average everyday, this is well done, light and fun. :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you willow

[Pete Langley]

Well, with no messages on the phone, you`ve got to pull the s**t out to get to the good stuff, man. I do the same. P.

[Baby Ricochet]

That's for sure. Thanks for stopping by

[Tai Ryens]

I was expecting some kind of rough, shower-house f*****g but it made me laugh that it wasn't. Your everyday moments must be such a bore, though I can see why.

[Baby Ricochet]

Psych! Thanks tai

[KAOlmsted]

xD ME TOO! (just saying...)

[Frieda P]

Me three!

[Debbie_Philly]

Your inspiration is riveting...lol. Nice... it made me laugh ;)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Debbie

[Annabelle Lee]

i like these thoughtless little schpeels of yours, ricochet. theyre a good way of escaping.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Annabelle

[Tabitha t]

good poem but it doesnt make sense coming from you. you are one of the few writers on here that i see getting a TON of reviews etc. good poem though

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Tabitha

[Frieda P]

I wanted to hear more about her shower, we've heard it all about your grips with the WC poets and how we sux, you not wanting to review blahblahblah, next time, stay on topic... ;-)

[Baby Ricochet]

I'll bear that in mind. Thanks for stopping by frieda

[Frieda P]

My pleasure ;-D