A simple Muse

For Lexus

         You're such a simple muse
         My uncomplicated lover
       My faithful little concubine
       I know there's not another

         Simple trusting charming
        Sweet as sweet could be
         Another willing playmate
        For the horny likes of me

        You think I'm oh so funny
     My war stories make you crawl
     You love the soothing sound
   of my deep set southern drawl

     You love the way I touch you
     Eager hands caress your skin
      Such a graceful curvy body
       Oh you delicious little sin

     You smell like cocoa butter
      You taste like Tangerines
     Such a warm inviting body
     Such a tasty little dream

      I'm a crazy kind of lover
       To f**k you like I do
    Then I'm sweet and gentle
     and whisper love to you

  Whisper that you're beautiful
     Whisper that you're mine
    Whisper all sorts of things
     That get into your mind

   I know what you're craving
  The excitement you long for
   It's not about commitment
       It's all about amore

 I'm so happy to have found you
     I might have past you by
 You're such a little sweet heart
  You make me swoon and sigh

      My ever faithful lover
      My savory little tart
     Just a simple minded muse
   With such a beautiful heart

Author's Note

I cranked this out pretty quick. A couple of the rhymes are kinda hokey. Maybe it needs editing. Fuck, I don't know.

Reviews

[Jamie Cook]

lol I loved how you're honest in you're poems and don't give two flying s***s cause its you're writing, but this was sweet and funny and awesome great job! :D

[James William Dyer]

Loved the picture :), the female a*s is the most beautiful thing to behold, like a heart when it's bent over. I feel like the places that need editing lie in lines like "such a beautiful heart", and that the strongest portions of the poem are in your descriptions of how ...."she smells of cocoa butter [sic]" "...and tastes of tangerines". Because of the poem's nature, the rhyming actually works well, but in order for it to have full effect, in my opinion, lines like "Im so happy to have found you" and "Im a crazy kind of lover" need to be reworded so as to stand out and buffet the rhymes. Just opinion. Liked the poem, different than your usual style.

[Baby Ricochet]

The Photo is of Betty Page. Thanks for your input. The piece is a bit choppy in a few spots

[Pax]

i didn't know you had that in you... the romantic you... it doesn't need an edit... its just fine as it is... she must really inspired you to write this... keep it up my friend... sweet and lovely write!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you mr pax

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Okay...now I'm swooning! This is my favorite write from you so far...this showcases your sweet, sexy, tender side.
Who woulda thunk it?!!! Baby's got a soft romantic side... LOVE IT!! :D
I would highlight the whole piece, but then again, that would be over the top of me to do so...
So I shall highlight the last two stanzas, because it's such a nice ending....a wonderful expression to exhale such precious thoughts... (sigh)


"I'm so happy to have found you
I might have past you by
You're such a little sweet heart
You make me swoon and sigh

My ever faithful lover
My savory little tart
Just a simple minded muse
With such a beautiful heart" ~ Lovely write, Baby!

[Baby Ricochet]

Why thank you Robbie. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It was a lovely tribute!...a pleasure to read. :)

[Summer]

A fickle kind of good.

[Michael G.]

Edit all you want... just don't screw up the tone, feel, and thought behind this one. You did well here, BR... very well.

[Kaylor Mason]

It doesn't really need editing except in one case--the word past in "I might have past you by". Wrong word--should be passed. Other than that, this is a side of you I've never seen. Maybe writing is helping you to balance yourself out and make your horizons a bit broader . . . or maybe you're just getting soft ;)

[Baby Ricochet]

Oh yeah. Thanks. Thanks for stopping by kailer

[Relic]

There is a slightly different side to you lurking in this one. I don't think it needs any editing BTW, it's fine and others love it so I wouldn't bother changing anything unless it really bothers you.

I like reading your poetry not just because you're good, but the insight I get into what people like about you. Good poem.

[Baby Ricochet]

Why thank you Relic. I'm genuinely flattered

[Relic]

No problem.

[Marie]

It could have been a lot shorter and said the same thing.

[Baby Ricochet]

Probably.

[Annabelle Lee]

it doesnt need anything. this ws beautiful

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Annabelle