Bad day

Bad day

A Poem by Baby Ricochet

They say death is silent
He never makes a sound
I got news for you pookey
Death is f*****g loud
Death sends tracer rounds
Screaming at your head
I'll take you if I want you
An inch away from dead
Death blacks out a crystal sky
Riding an aluminum frame
Death lyes hiding in the ground
Playing his trickster games
Death is on a cell phone
Talking to mortar crews
Setting up coordinates
Then were on the us news
Death runs at a check point
Singing Allah be praised
Death squeezed his trigger finger
and blew a 14 year old away

© 2013 Baby Ricochet


Author's Note

Baby Ricochet
I don't work on these types of poems. They just happen.

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Oh, this is intense! Made me think...I am gonna linger on this a while ~:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Baby Ricochet

11 Years Ago

Thank you PoppySilver. Nice to see you again
Ruth

11 Years Ago

And you :)
Your comment screams in experienced horrors and survival. Your writing tells of your talent. Together, you are alive with many more writings, just waiting to be born.
A true poet is one that experiences a poem then transcribes it into birth....
~pat

Posted 11 Years Ago


I can tell. They have that quick thought vibe to them. Not that it's a bad thing. I kinda like the concept btw.

Posted 11 Years Ago


very powerful

Posted 11 Years Ago


Baby Ricochet

11 Years Ago

thank you Lucien
*Shudder* nice write

Posted 11 Years Ago


Baby Ricochet

11 Years Ago

Thank you Annabelle
Chilling. But if you ever call me Pookey again, it's on ;-) Seriously, though...when these pieces "just happen" they do so in a most profound way; and with the title, I feel like you're showing an enormous amount of respect to your own feelings on the subject, which, in turn, allows me, as the reader, to have an enormous amount of respect for you. Extremely well done, Baby. Thank you for sharing this with us.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Baby Ricochet

11 Years Ago

Thank you kimmer
KAOlmsted

11 Years Ago

Always my pleasure.
so true, this draws you in, the last parts of it are very sad.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Baby Ricochet

11 Years Ago

Yes, thank you
Interesting poem. I like the way you've portrayed death; something that is always shifting and changing his appearance. And it is very true. Death is all of these things - and more. People have become desensitized to death, through media or some sick part of human nature, I don't know, but it is almost nothing now. You go on the news and they report about shootings or stabbings or school massacres in an almost nonchalant tone. And, sadly, people are getting killed every day by guns or knives or whatever have you.

The description is very nice. I picture the bright orange-red tracer rounds hailing down on people. I picture the mortars and Death, laughing, on his cell phone. I see the checkpoint. But the lines I like the most are "Death blacks out a crystal sky" and "Death squeezed his trigger finger/and blew a 14 year old away." Very striking and very discomforting. Nicely done, Ricochet.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Baby Ricochet

11 Years Ago

Thank you Mr Crow
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Mic
I like this, good anger, no sugarcoating. Makes me think of a punk rock song.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Baby Ricochet

11 Years Ago

Thank you
Life is not a banquet when you're sandwiched between two slices of dead.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Baby Ricochet

11 Years Ago

Ha! I like that. Thank you for the review man

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Baby Ricochet
Baby Ricochet

Tampa, FL



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