Medivac poem

Rotors thump overhead

Load broken bloody bodies aboard

He died on the flight back 

We were devastated

we all want to go home

where the streets aren't rivers of sewage

Where a man on a  cell phone isn't a sniper's spotter

Where a TV remote contol isn't a remote detonator

Where an empty street doesn't mean an ambush

Where your feet don't spit open with fatigue

Where you don't see your friends mangled by IED'S

and hear they died on the deck of a medivac chopper

We all want to go home

But home won't be there

Not the home we want to go back to

We're not spritely cocky boys anymore.

We're bitter used up old men

Reviews

[saratogaparty]

This imagery hurts.

[Baby Ricochet]

yes it does

[SteveB]

Outstanding! Leaving aside the obvious raw emotion which hads already been commented on let me just praise it as a poem. The repetition of "where" strikes hard. It is like a series of punches or, perhaps like the whoop, whoop of a rotor. The "But" then strikes a jarring note setting up the final lines. Well written, well structured and damn well done.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanks. I don't write these types of poems anymore. They just wear me down.

[SteveB]

I can understand why.

[Aeneas Barton]

Those closing lines really hit hard

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[KAOlmsted]

I gave a lot of thought to what I might say in a review of this piece, and everything I came up with was inconsequential compared to the work.

Very compelling write. Thank you for posting this.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[That_Girl]

One of your best, Baby. Gripping. Nicely done.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[RachelReaper]

what has the world come to...? A rotting hellhole. nice poem, I agree that the world is a dangerous place. No where is the place for blissful innocence anymore.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[Frieda P]

This grabs me down deep where angst and death reside. Much food for thought, none of it tasteful. Genius write.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[AYVID N]

One of your most touching works. I am very moved by what they go through on the killing fields and I respect you deeply for that! You jest a lot but here I see that poignant wonderful writer clearly through! You rock baby! 100/100

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[Michael G.]

This truly is one of your best, BR... in my opinion. When you get serious, there is a whole different BR that comes out. Very well done, sir.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you