Bodybuilding Haiku

A 45 lb Olympic bar and 6 45 lb plates is 315 lbs.

Heavy flat bench

Six fortyfive pound plates

The ox moves the mountain

Reviews

[RachelReaper]

I can lift twenty five pounds sometimes....! yeah, I know, its kind of sad....
but this is my favorite haiku from you, it just seems to flow right

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[Tai Ryens]

"The ox moves the mountain," made me smile. Portrayal of muscle-builders that simply take it too far as oxen was brilliant!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[Ruth]

:) And sees the strength hit crescendo...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[Kaylor Mason]

I used to do bodybuilding, till I got so bulky I could't reach my arms around my back

[Baby Ricochet]

Bodybuilding is my religion

[Annabelle Lee]

its like weights class during my break. thanks for reminding me of wht i get to go back to. haha but it was.a good poem. well done

[Baby Ricochet]

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[KAOlmsted]

*sigh* Yes...kimmer does love a big, big boy...*sigh sigh sigh*

Oh. Right. Poetry. Good job. On the poetry.

:-D

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[That_Girl]

Haha I can imagine... nice! :D

[Baby Ricochet]

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[Steven]

Nice. Again, syllable count in English doesn't really matter. Just keep it, in total, less than 18 (just not too far under), and its fine to call a haiku. Incidentally, some linguistically chunky 5 7 5 (English) haiku is actually too long. The Japanese idea of the syllable is a bit different from ours. Also if the subject matter shows humanity at all its technically a senryu. Haiku is purely about nature, animals, or inanimate things. Basically everything non human.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for your input Steven. I appreciate it.

[Marie]

I like this haiku; it says a lot. Ane your syllable count is almost right.

[DrD]

I just don't get it
This haiku poetry form
Just words no reason

[Baby Ricochet]

My computer crashed so I'm posting on my phone so I gotta work short. Besides they're fun to write.