Sex haiku

I'm just a USMC grunt so I'm not sure about the sylible count but the way I see it my old corps brethren kicked the Japanese asses back in WW ll so I don't have to listen to the Japanese

Her body beckons me

touch and tease me baby

soft petals drift away

Reviews

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

I like it, it's thrifty and enjoyable.

[Mia]

Me likes :D

[chandlerl]

this one is quite beautiful

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[Kaylor Mason]

I've never tried a haiku before

[Baby Ricochet]

They're easy

[RachelReaper]

nice haiku

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Rachel

[DrD]

You do this to me even though you know I'm not into haiku. No one wanted to read my haiku palindrome
eve, eve, eve, eve, eve
eve, eve, eve, eve, eve, eve, eve
eve, eve, eve, eve, eve
But we both know that no one really appreciates art these days. Okay, so it was a fun read and I enjoyed it but I'm still not into haiku.

[Baby Ricochet]

Since my computer crashed I'm working short on a smart phone. Thank you for the review doc..

[Marie]

From what I understand if you aren't writing in Japanese the syllable count doesn't matter
Do you mean"pedals" or "petals" in the last line? Each conveys a different meaning.

[Baby Ricochet]

Pedals. Thank you. I fixed it. Grunts can't spell either.

[Baby Ricochet]

That's petals. Goddamn smartphone.

[KAOlmsted]

I'm glad you accepted the challenge ;-) And I love your description. The piece is enticing and sensuous, as opposed to overtly sexy, so very well done there. A USMC grunt with a soft side ;-) I'm with Corset, by the way...666...that's gotta mean something :-D I genuinely liked this...you never cease to amaze. Thanks for sharing it with us, Baby.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you kindly miss kimmer.

[KAOlmsted]

always a pleasure, Mr. Ricochet ;-)

[Corset]

LOL... a man with a gun can write however and call it whatever the hell he pleases..lol! ( I think it's an off kilter senryu haha) mmm 3 six count lines-666 your scary..lol...JK!!!

[Baby Ricochet]

Maybe I'll call these pieces senryu instead of haiku. Thank you for the review corset

[Pax]

now that's interesting my friend...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[Pax]

its me pax my friend.. i hope i didn't confuse u for the temporary name change... your most welcome...

[Baby Ricochet]

Cool photo Mr pax