Hand guns pop rifles crack

hand guns pop and rifles crack

thats the sound they make

metal rounds rip the bodies

of the souls they take

bullets are dependable

they never let you down

if your aim is square and true

your target hits the ground

he was dead eye steady

26 people are dead

youve any idea what its like

to see a bullet destroy a head 

if you're not horrified

somethings wrong with you

20 childeren to rheir graves

merry christmas mr scrooge

Author's Note

Written on a smart phone in 15 minutes

Reviews

[chandlerl]

THis would make a really cool song,

[Baby Ricochet]

Good idea

[lee von cleef]

Horrified, honorific,the thoughts consume,to stay sane help a neighbor, today.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[Steven]

There's a compulsion at the end of sanity to break something beautiful.

[Baby Ricochet]

Great quote br0! Thank you for the review

[Annabelle Lee]

Not too bad for a smart phone, Ricochet. This event scarred America. This stuff shouldn't be happning! This the United States! What the f**k are we fighting other countries for when we cause enough damage to ourselves

[RachelReaper]

I am horrified, though its a reality of everyday, that just makes it even worse. and for fifteen minutes you know how to capture someone's attention.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review.

[LA Lorena]

no pretty imagery here, just cold, hard and brutal reality. Thank you.

Sometimes it just needs to be told the way it is, without all the softness and delicacy, like a slap in the face.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review.

[Pax]

its a shocking fact my friend... tragic infact...
well expressed poem!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review Mr pax.

[Tai Ryens]

Well . . . Cold as may sound, too many people grieve for what they have no clue about. Only the blind would mourn losses like these (although, acknowledging them is absolutely wise), for moments such as these happen daily in some undeveloped countries. Not that I dare consider them unworthy of my time, but rather that people make a tremendous deal of it is a waste of my time.
Long rant short, to memorialize such a tragic event is wise; but to have it influence your mind and trigger mourning without a single thought of other massacres is inconsiderate, and feeble.

'Tis time to halt ranting and continue on with a review . . .
Well, to have this written in 15 minutes is truly talented. There were many aspects I'd like to point out; but the one line that shines brighter than others in this poem is the Scrooge reference ending this. It was brilliant, and clever.

[Baby Ricochet]

I know what you're saying tai but people mourn their own kind more than they will others. I'm still troubled by the American public complacency over the Iraq war. The bush administration lied to the public, ignored the advice of the well informed and did to Iraq what Hitler did to Poland. Once the truth came out there should have been massive protests all over this great nation. But it was over there, not here so it

[Baby Ricochet]

Didn't matter.

[Tai Ryens]

Ah, I've found that truth long ago as well. Oh well, nothing we could do save for constantly complain about it.

[KAOlmsted]

Thanks for phoning it in...

Seriously, though, I don't know if kids/people understand what actual bullets can do...you make a valid point. If you know what those metal jackets look like when worn by human beings...well...that ain't such good fashion.

Thanks for the Baby fix...

[Baby Ricochet]

Sure, thing kimmer. Thank you for the review.

[Relic]

I heard they all had multiple wounds. It's so horrible to think of a child destroyed in the way you describe. There's a special place in hell for that kid who did it.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[Relic]

You're welcome.