Memories

              There must be something I can do tonight

                The air is heavy as I drink and Breathe

                              Memories crawl

                  Like snakes through my bones

                                   Moving

                                 On my own

 

Singing minarets echo in some gapping dreary distance

     Sand choking life out of my lungs and stinging face

Closing rotors thump across a bombed out terror landscape

  Diesel engines moaning with a reassuring grace

 

           There must be somewhere I can go tonight

           My heart is breaking with the burden of you

             What desert fires had frozen dead still

                                  I lost my will

 

Hardened memories seeping through my splitting bleeding skin

   Distant smiles and promises that never came to stay

    I weep into my broken hands with a hard resistance

   For the hallowed memories that turned my ashes grey

Reviews

[Heather]

it feels like this is one of those poems that just has to come out...like you can't take another breath until you put it on paper because the words are so powerful and profound. I can see the emotions in this one... makes me want to reach out my hand and say.. I understand my friend. Very powerful and profound.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reviewing Memories Heather

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

This is so moving, as so much of your writing, and yet it is a new way for you. There is such powerful emotions expressed that one cannot help but feel you. Wow, I don't know what else to say.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reviewing Memories Shimmerbliss

[Patricia B. Hepler]

To write from the soul is the truest form of expression.
To share this write is the truest form of trust...
Excellent.
*pat

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reviewing memories Pat

[violetta york / nicki e..]

I love this! As usual... lol. I enjoy all of your work. This was great :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reviewing memories Nicole

[Baby Ricochet]

I didn't forget you ;) Baby R. Never... but I want to be honest when I come here...
So this one touched me, even when I felt you felt a lil Itchy... somehow.
But I loved to see here a more connection to what it's really about.

And you know the answer, all behind fun, laugh, and denial... wonderful one.

E.L.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[Pax]

this must be your best with highly emotional state imagery...
deeply profound and poignant write!!!
a fantastic work...

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you for reviewing memories Mr Pax

[James William Dyer]

Yeah!! Great emotion, you're evolving wonderfully, bro! That area where the poem breaks up there, the space between stanzas, below that you throw in a lot of adjectives that make it a little wordy to me. That opening is incredible, and I felt your inner dialogue here. I almost feel that one line, "THERE MUST BE SOMEWHERE I CAN GO TONIGHT" should be the very last line of the poem, to cap it off and send the Reader's head in another direction, just my opinion. Really truly enjoyed reading this and watching your style evolve with your heart.

[Baby Ricochet]

I write poems like this quickly and don't do to much editing. Where they're coming from is a completely different place than the funny poems. I can sit on those, move them around, edit, delete, whatever. These types, not so much. Thank you for reviewing memories James

[RachelReaper]

your getting into some... deep stuff here. not what I'm used to from you, but very, very good, none the less

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reviewing Memories Rachel

[Marie]

Baby Ricochet, you make me almost weep.
Have you lost the power to be amusing?

[Baby Ricochet]

I can't write funny when I'm in on of my darker moods. Writing poems like this one is a hell of a lot healthier than some of the other things I've tried when depressed

[That_Girl]

PoppySilver nailed it. Immensely emotional and raw. Wonderfully penned.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reviewing Memories girl