Burns

My answer to the poem "Playing With Children" by ... I know he's probably an alienated teenager trying to be a bad a*s but some things I can't let slip by without comment.

Someone wrote a poem about burning children alive

Let's take a trip down Ricochet's memory archive

A few lasting impressions that may shed some light

On civilian ignorance and the horror of human plight

 

Burned and broken bodies screaming in the night

Digging through the rubble of another air strike

Little flaming victims snatch their life away

Living breathing dying in violence and decay

 

Momma's so frantic she can't find you anywhere

In the shattered ruins of splinters and despair

Daddy's desperately digging in smoldering wreckage

Praying to Allah for an Angel with a survivor message

 

A pink sweater is seen peaking out of the rubble

It was her favorite color it made her smile bubble

Clear away the twisted rebar, mortar, and broken stone

Pull her barely breathing from her instant tombstone

 

She was so badly burned there's nothing they can do

She died within the hour her young life was through

Mommy and daddy's screaming pain fill up the sky

Consumed by grief and agony all they can do is cry

 

Just another horrific scene from the land of the gun

So post burning baby poems yeah that might be fun

But those of us that defended the land of milk and honey

Know that kind of ignorant s**t aint so f*****g funny

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I'm not suggesting ... delete a single line of his work. He's got a right to post whatever he pleases. I'm fine with that. To me it's all about the truth and the reality of severly burned children beyond horrific. Trust me on that.

Reviews

[Pax]

this is great, a picture imagery of horrifying experience from you my friend..
I see that this person doesn't see the reality of the events he mention...his mind is a very dark place... and your right..he has every right for freedom of speech...i guess his works is just disturbing...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reading burns mr pax

[Marie]

I did not read the work you speak of, and so I don't know what he wrote. I'm sure I don't want to.

[Baby Ricochet]

No marie, you don't.

[Tai Ryens]

I could have sworn I've written poems that mention burning children . . . Now I'm curious, might I ask for a link to the other's poem about it?

[That_Girl]

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Xaphyx/887070/

[Baby Ricochet]

Your imagery is metaphorical ... piece was literal. THis isn't about me being the morality police and I don't want to see anyone's work get censored. Christ I wrote two disturbing poems about a serial killer that murdered prostitutes. This is about getting the truth out.

[Baby Ricochet]

I never had but I'm sure it's T back girl

[That_Girl]

Exactly. He was trying for a major shock value and he failed. Instead his poem was horrifically psychotic and depressing. This however, is honest and meaningful. Great job.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you T Girl

[That_Guy]

Idk if you ever googled T girl but uhhh yeah you know what don't do it...

[That_Girl]

lol

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My poem wasn't a failure if you found it 'horrifically psychotic and depressing'. That's exactly what I wanted to convey. My poem was just as honest and meaningful. You don't like it because you don't like me and the way I express myself,and that's why you're reacting this way. But it doesn't matter. People are free to hate me and what I do. I'm well aware that most of the world doesn't like the kind of person I am. I don't know if I'll ever change or even if I can.

I'm not going to ask you to remove this, and I greatly respect that you're not actually asking me to remove mine. However, I'm still going to defend myself to the bitter end. I hope you can understand that.

[That_Girl]

You know.... I may not like you or the poem you wrote, but I do respect the fact that you didn't come over and call me every name under the sun in the hopes that it would piss me off. I'd rather leave this as is and not get into a pissing contest. Freedoms of speech. We will both utilize it naturally.

[Baby Ricochet]

It's admirable to stand by your work when it comes under fire and I respect that.

[Crazy Cat Man]

A great poem and a great response to that other guy's dumb poem about burning children. Blah people just wanna shock.

[Baby Ricochet]

Yes they do. THank you for reading burns cat.