Burns

My answer to the poem "Playing With Children" by ... I know he's probably an alienated teenager trying to be a bad a*s but some things I can't let slip by without comment.

Someone wrote a poem about burning children alive

Let's take a trip down Ricochet's memory archive

A few lasting impressions that may shed some light

On civilian ignorance and the horror of human plight

 

Burned and broken bodies screaming in the night

Digging through the rubble of another air strike

Little flaming victims snatch their life away

Living breathing dying in violence and decay

 

Momma's so frantic she can't find you anywhere

In the shattered ruins of splinters and despair

Daddy's desperately digging in smoldering wreckage

Praying to Allah for an Angel with a survivor message

 

A pink sweater is seen peaking out of the rubble

It was her favorite color it made her smile bubble

Clear away the twisted rebar, mortar, and broken stone

Pull her barely breathing from her instant tombstone

 

She was so badly burned there's nothing they can do

She died within the hour her young life was through

Mommy and daddy's screaming pain fill up the sky

Consumed by grief and agony all they can do is cry

 

Just another horrific scene from the land of the gun

So post burning baby poems yeah that might be fun

But those of us that defended the land of milk and honey

Know that kind of ignorant s**t aint so f*****g funny

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I'm not suggesting ... delete a single line of his work. He's got a right to post whatever he pleases. I'm fine with that. To me it's all about the truth and the reality of severly burned children beyond horrific. Trust me on that.

Reviews

[Pax]

this is great, a picture imagery of horrifying experience from you my friend..
I see that this person doesn't see the reality of the events he mention...his mind is a very dark place... and your right..he has every right for freedom of speech...i guess his works is just disturbing...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reading burns mr pax

[Anjelica Allen]

This poem literally gave me goosebumps, brought a tear to my eye, and made me sick to my stomach. I have friends who are veterans (from Afghanistan and Iraq) that feel the exact same way as this. They won't talk about it, but I can see it in their eyes and frowns when someone makes a joke about burning people or violence. Sometimes that person making the joke has been myself. Thank you for taking an often unheard voice of the terrors of war that was more of imagery and art than a slap in the face. Sometimes I need to be reminded that I'm pretty damn lucky.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reviewing Burns Anjelica

[Anjelica Allen]

Thank you for writing it.

[samanthan]

sad that someone would think burning children is funny. whether you seen it in real life or not.
You're a brilliant writer.

But those of us that defended the land of milk and honey
Know that kind of ignorant s**t aint so f*****g funny

thank you.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reviewing Burns samanthan.

[TLK]

"from the land of the gun"

Some people want all of us to live here, all of the time.

[Baby Ricochet]

I wrote a poem awhile back named "The Land Of The Gun" based heavily on my experience with night patrols in urban settings and house raids so that's where that line comes from. Thank you for reviewing burns TLK.

[Sirius King]

a sad truth that we really need to hear
these kind of things should be on the news daily
the ppl in this country are so blind to the horrors
going on around the world, its sickening


idk about the other writer, but im glad u wrote this piece
very powerful man

[Baby Ricochet]

The pentagon learned from the vietnam war that uncencored images across America's living rooms undermined civilian moral. You may be to young to remember the first gulf war "Desert Storm." That war got called off short in part because of images from the "Highway of Death" when Coalition air power desimated a beaten Iraqi army as it withdrew down the only highway that lead out of Kuwiat into Iraq. I've been down that very highway and much of the wreckage from that event is still there. It's in the middle of the desert so the Iraqis didn't see the need to clean it up.

[Sirius King]

yea so they force us to watch Lindsay Lohan, Snookie, and honey boo boo... blinding us from whats really going on in the world... they know if we aren't informed we wont fight against it... but hey us Americans seem to be comfortable with our ignorance, not knowing frees us from the responsibility to take action

[Kadessa (Kaddy)]

I want to know the jerk posting poems about burning childeren

[Baby Ricochet]

His avatar name is ... That's what it is, just ... He seems like an alienated teenager who wanted a negative reaction and got far more than he bargained for. I did stress not to delete his piece, that's not what Burns is about. It's about truth. I've seen horrifically burned people including children and no one who's seen horrors like that would never be so flippant when writing on the subject. Freedom of speech is the most important right we have. He exercised his and I exercised mine. That's it

[Flo_writer]

The truth of this poem brings me such sadness. It's a crazy world we live in when we don't take such an horrific act seriously. For someone to be so vile is almost not believable. My heart bleeds for humanity and all its sinful capacities. This is a tragically truthful poem. The message was strong while maintaining the rhythmic vibe. I say kudos to you for your talent and heartfelt consideration.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reading Burns Flo_ Writer

[unknown]

This is a very outstanding poem. I can understand where you're coming from. I don't like it when people post that kind of stuff up, and to me, it seems like they shouldn't be posting it at all.

Thank you for this poem. It has a good message, and great flow to it. You should definitely write another one like it. :)

Betha

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reading Burns Betha

[unknown]

LOL. You're welcome, burns ricochet.

[Corset]

I'm sorry that you had to run across something that made you relive this horror, people who have never experienced something like this have no clue the effect that it will have on someone who has.

[Baby Ricochet]

No, they don't. This isn't the first protest poem I've written over what some one posted on WC. People write ignorant things, okay, 1st emendment, I'm down with that so don't delete it, but you're going to have to defend it.

[nigrum homonculus]

i never read the poem "playing with children" but he must of had a weird a*s mind to be thinking that was funny. your imagery in this was damn intense man. conveniently i read this while mad world was playing on my phone so it set the mood even more. was some powerful s**t bro. couldn't imagine what you felt like when you saw that. excellent write.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanks PhilGod. There are some things I can't let go by without saying something.