Burns

My answer to the poem "Playing With Children" by ... I know he's probably an alienated teenager trying to be a bad a*s but some things I can't let slip by without comment.

Someone wrote a poem about burning children alive

Let's take a trip down Ricochet's memory archive

A few lasting impressions that may shed some light

On civilian ignorance and the horror of human plight

 

Burned and broken bodies screaming in the night

Digging through the rubble of another air strike

Little flaming victims snatch their life away

Living breathing dying in violence and decay

 

Momma's so frantic she can't find you anywhere

In the shattered ruins of splinters and despair

Daddy's desperately digging in smoldering wreckage

Praying to Allah for an Angel with a survivor message

 

A pink sweater is seen peaking out of the rubble

It was her favorite color it made her smile bubble

Clear away the twisted rebar, mortar, and broken stone

Pull her barely breathing from her instant tombstone

 

She was so badly burned there's nothing they can do

She died within the hour her young life was through

Mommy and daddy's screaming pain fill up the sky

Consumed by grief and agony all they can do is cry

 

Just another horrific scene from the land of the gun

So post burning baby poems yeah that might be fun

But those of us that defended the land of milk and honey

Know that kind of ignorant s**t aint so f*****g funny

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I'm not suggesting ... delete a single line of his work. He's got a right to post whatever he pleases. I'm fine with that. To me it's all about the truth and the reality of severly burned children beyond horrific. Trust me on that.

Reviews

[Pax]

this is great, a picture imagery of horrifying experience from you my friend..
I see that this person doesn't see the reality of the events he mention...his mind is a very dark place... and your right..he has every right for freedom of speech...i guess his works is just disturbing...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reading burns mr pax

[A. V. Madison]

I read that poem, where that guy talked about burning children. Sickened me to my core, because I felt the same way you did- there is children that are being burnt alive in real life. That poem he posted was mortifying.

[Baby Ricochet]

The kid that wrote the poem was clearly dealing with alienation issues and I felt bad for him when he posted how much we all hated him because everyone hated him but that wasn't the point I was making with this. I've seen what phosphorus and high explosives can do to human beings and I couldn't let that poem he wrote slip by without comment

[KillerWithWords]

What a horrific scene you've masterly drawn.
The emotions speak from the characters.
The take home message is oh-so-clear.
thumbs way up.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[Frieda P]

My son is a firefighter and has witnessed this too. It's a great write about a horrific subject. I can't say more about such tragic circumstances.

[twinklestar]

Eye opener :/ what we read on the internet and see on the news is different then actually being there... Reading this piece takes you there . Thank you for posting this it's unfortunate but great to see someone writing for these poor unfortunate souls :/.

Twinkle

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reviewing Burns Twinkle

[Michael G.]

A sad reality of truth. Responsibly written, BR.

[Baby Ricochet]

THank you Michael

[poeticpiers]

People become desensitised to pictures of the horrors of war. Unless you've seen the actuality it is hard to visualise. The death and destruction caused by indiscriminate use of military force..
My war was long ago but little has changed innocent children suffer without understanding why.

[Baby Ricochet]

The weapons are better but the brutality stays the same. Thank you for reviewing Burns poetiopiers

[Elizabeth]

Reminds me of stories my love tells about Ramadi. Horriffic. The last two lines are miraculous...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reviewing Burns Elizabeth

[InsanityWriter]

Very powerful. Death is horrific, and children do not deserve to be burned to death.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for reviewing burns insantity writer

[Steven Cash]

wow thanks for posting

I wanted to tear the guy who wrote the burns poem to shreads

[Baby Ricochet]

I think you mean "Playing with children." Thank you for reviewing Burns steven

[lee von cleef]

"Tell all the truth but tell it slant" Emily said it so ,but baby Ricochet has grown up now not then,His words like black honey should make you stiff,not "slant" like Emily,
A starched collar,a field full of men in" half time", will make you cry, marvel ,but it takes discipline to dig through rubble,That's why people need to learn simple stuff,
some of us are wired to react,when you hear a horse thrashing against a wall,you run to it to help, so should any one else standing near, don't freeze and stare.
If your down in a hole taking "Dope" off a pipe ,that once was a hundred and is now
85% thinner, don't ever run,because a pipeline crew, is wired together too, when a line like that blows some one is going to get burned.If they are running so do you.
Baby Ricochet's words,hit you in the mouth, knock out a tooth,sometimes that happens when you stir some one up who knows Truth.Thank you "Emily Dickinson"

[Baby Ricochet]

WOW! This review is almost better than the poem is! Thanks man.

[KAOlmsted]

Baby, you should read the one he left on "I Call This One Rick" on my page...f*****g brilliant.