A Jealous Baby Ricochet.

The events in this story happened in 1999/2000. Before Marines were big heros. This is my first story so look out. This could suck.

Back when I was dating my wife most of her friends were clueless why I held the magnetism over her that I did. On the face of it we could not have been more different. She was a liberal art school club girl from southern california and I was a lean mean fighting Marine from South Carolina. About the last guy on the planet these people could picture her with. What they didn't get was the power of the underlying archetypal attraction between us as Knight and Damsel. While all these southern Ca guys were trying to be cool and smooth with her in their game I came riding into her life on a black war horse covered in Armor. When we met I knelt before her, kissed her hand, laid my sword at her feet and she was slayed. The splitting cracks in my Armor started to appear in the form of jealous rages I was to come notorious for.

 

 

    Gina had about a gazzilion friends. Whenever we'd go out to clubs a procession of people would run up to her all huggy and kissy. Mostly girls, gay dudes and harmless straight guys. I was fine with that. There was this one guy though, Nick. Oooh did he ever get under my skin. He was a snarky little s**t who didn't know when to shut the f**k up and obviously wanted Gina. Nick viewed me as an ignorant brutish jarhead that had no business being with a girl he wanted and I viewed him as a sniveling civilian coward with an a*s that was just begging to have my boot print stomped into it. Two opposing views that all but insured the confrontation that came.

     One night when we were out and I had a bit to much to drink Nick's crew just happen to roll into the club Gina and I were at. During a brief conversation in which Nick refered to me as "Eichmann" and made a few flirtatious comments towards Gina I dragged him out into the parking lot by his arm to as I so eloquently put it "settle this s**t right the f**k now." Once Nick realized the spot he was in he tried to de-escalate the situation but I wasn't having it. (picture Henry Rollins in a fight with Bill Maher) He was going to get a lesson in why it was a f**k bad idea to insult my honor and have covetous eyes for my girl. Unfortunately this lesson took place in the parking lot of a crowded club with dozens of people looking on many of which were Gina's friends who held the view I was some kind of Nazi and me bullying a hapless Nick was the proof. I didn't hurt him. I just put him in an arm bar, pinned him to an SUV and gave him a piece of my mind. By that point he was to scared to do or say anything. Nick had been thoroughly humiliated and so was Gina. She was seriously pissed at me and it took a lot of explaining and begging before she would forgive me. After that you would have thought I would have learned. Nope.

      A few months later there was another incident. This time it was a guy she worked with. I saw a couple of texts I didn't like and asked Gina what was going on. "Oh he's harmless" she assured me, "I'll tell him to stop." I believed her but I thought the message would be better understood if I was the one to deliver it. I knew who he was so I went down to the Barnes and Noble Gina worked at the next day for "a talk" with this guy. I lured him over to a quiet corner of the store and impressed upon him why it would be in his best interest not to talk to Gina out side of work. Apparently I was convincing cause he ran straight to store management and told them Gina's psychotic boy friend had threatend him. Gina got into trouble and I got banned from the store. To me I was making certain my message was understood. To gina I had humiliated her in front of her co-workers and had yet again lived up to my image as a Nazi. The book store incident was the first time Gina openly questioned our relationship and it took a lot more explaining, begging and this time crying before she would forgive me. It wasn't that I thought Gina was cheating on me or ever would. It just seriously set me off when other guys took liberties with what in my mind was mine. The club incident with Nick was one thing. That a*****e had been begging me for an a*s kicking from the moment I met him but the book store incident, I was out of line.

      I let a couple of months go by before I snuck back into the book store to talk to the guy. I apologized for scaring the crap out of him and he was gracious about it. The book store ban was lifted and the whole mess blew over. I may have a jealous streak but when I'm wrong I'll admit it and try to make it right.

Author's Note

Thank you so much for reading the whole thing. I'd like to write more stories but there's no doubt poetry gets more play on this site. If I get a good response for this I'll write another one about an incident that happened after we were married that made these two confrontations look like a meeting at a sunday school brunch.

Reviews

[nigrum homonculus]

a look into your life. interesting. you are right about how people tend not read something that is lengthy. i am one of those people. but you wrote this well. hooked me from the beginning. its kind of inspired me to write another one of my little diary entries. not that anyone will look at it but to just get it out there you know? seriously write another. this insight in to your life is entertaining and intriguing.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanx for reading PhilGod. I'm glad you liked it and it inspired you to write more. That poem you wrote about Supenman trashing a gym inspired me to write more funny poems. Love the new name. It makes you sound awesome. Like ZeusGod. Cool.

[Baby Ricochet]

Superman that is. Freakin typos

[nigrum homonculus]

ah anytime man. haha for real? thanks that actually means a lot. haha yeah its a name my friends gave me. ZeusGod? sounds like something you would name a giant boxing robot!

[Baby Ricochet]

HA! That would be so cool.

[Kaylor Mason]

He called you Eichmann? Seriously? That's a whole new kind of sick low right there

[Baby Ricochet]

It was before 9/11. We weren't being worshipped as heros then. THat's when I was stationed at Camp Pendleton in Southern CA. There was animosity towards us Marines from a lot of the younger people then. It's Southern CA. Where the hippys were born so it's obvious why.

[Kaylor Mason]

Hmmm. It does figure that the type of guys who would call Marines Nazis are the ones that have never seen a true Nazi in their whole lives, and as usual don't have a clue as to what they're talking about . . . such is the power of ignorance and babies born on mind-expanding drugs

[Baby Ricochet]

For sure.

[KAOlmsted]

I don't even like to say the word "blog" much less encourage somebody to write one, but this has the feel of a blog entry to me, and I wonder if you might utilize that aspect of this site for these personal anecdotes...I would totally read your *ahem* blog (stupid word) every day--or however often you posted there. And you are absolutely correct in that most people on this site don't give a toss about stories, especially of any length (believe me when I tell you I know this all too well) so maybe a blog (sounds like I'm throwing up a little in my mouth *laugh*) might be the way to go for you, Baby.

On the other hand, you have such a following, you could write the introduction to an eleventh grade math text book and people would tell you you're f*****g brilliant *eye roll & laugh*

As a "story" it was -meh- but as an anecdote, I found it to be compelling and truthful and I hope to see you develop more, artistically and technically, as you write more. Bottom line: not a bad first effort. Keep up the hard work!

-kimmer

[Baby Ricochet]

Well thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[RachelReaper]

Dude, I freaking wish I could writer things that could captivate people's attention like this, and then i read the author's note, "make these 2 confrontations look like a meeting at a sunday school brunch"... oh, God, what on earth did you do? lol, I'm interested to find out.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you so much for reading my work Rachel. Glad you liked it. Definitely had a possessive issue then.

[RachelReaper]

meh, nobody's perfect.

[Michael G.]

I have always had the impression personally to write what I wanted or felt compelled to write. I don't write anything because of the site I happen to show them publicly, unless it has a specific connection to the site.
I may be inspired here at times; (how can you not be with so much talent?) but, in the end, I write what I feel. Then it's up to the reader to give it validity.
You have done this since you started showing your work here. I would urge you to continue to do so. You write well, in my opinion. A little raw at times; but, that is part of your "style."
Keep writing what you feel and let them stand... or fail, on their own.
My bet is you will succeed more than you fail.

[Baby Ricochet]

Sage advice for sure. Thank you for reading Mr. G.

[Pax]

This is like a journal of you... and your life.... You should write more...I like this kind of thing... having a dose of reality than fiction...but still fiction makes us dream so don't stop writing it as well... Yeah I know the feeling very well that stories here and books are not getting much the attention it needed...not like poetry.. well about the story: it's...I agree with That_girl..she is girl indeed who understand best on girls...Trust and jealousy has a fine line between them... like the one in my poem...Jealousy is cute at times Yet Possessiveness is another term of Obsessiveness...so don't cross that line...it will be a problem..
great work my friend...keep it up

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you so much for reading. On this site the longer it is the less views it's going to get. That's the problem with stories, particularly if they're not well written. Poetry isn't that hard to write but a good story is something else entirely. Some of the best responses I've gotten are on pieces I wrote in about thirty minutes. I couldn't do that with a story. WHere in the hell am I going with this? F**k I don't know. Anyway, thanx for reading and yes I did have a possesiveness issue with her that got me into trouble more than once.

[Pax]

i think it depends on how you promote your stories like how books are sold...and it really depends on the quality...on how you write it...i think the key is on how will you entertain your audience no matter what genre your in...but all in all it really depends on the person what he/she likes...to suspense, action or fantasy or etc...
I don't promote my story much..
in terms of poetry...i think it's not that easy in terms of emotional poem...what makes an emotional poem attractive, because its feelings in it..the uplifting, happy, sad or dark feelings on it that people like and can relate into..I myself write it...and it makes me harder to write it..without those emotions...specially if i have mood swings...which is the worst time to write...
I hope you'd overcome that negative emotions...it's not really healthy..anyways..i know you will..your a strong person and can do anything...
don't worry were here to read your story...

[Baby Ricochet]

THat's certainly true. When it comes to poems it's easy for me to write funny or angry. I'm a wise cracker type with an anger issue so those two modes of expression are cake for me. I can do creepy too but that takes work. As an example it took about an hour to write "Designated driver" and I worked on "Brides Maid of Sores" for days. Funny easy, creepy serial killer, hard. About the only way to promote on this site is have a crap load of friends to send RR'S to and review their work to see who pays it back then focus on them. That'll get you some reviews

[Pax]

hahaha....crap load of friends to send RR'S ...that's funny..if you put it that way...but it’s the truth...and I kinda have enough of those people...who send and send without paying back...what i do for now is stop paying attention to them... but i have some favorite authors are like that...and i don't mind because they're really good..
You have talent for creating a creepy serial killer character ...and I've read all of those and they are really good...I wish i could manage to do it someday...because i need that kind of character in my stories...it makes the story more exciting...U did Great job on what you do in that...

[That_Guy]

as always I like your work. Being from Southern California I was looking for an excuse to puff out my chest and defend it but I don't feel I need to ;)

I like your character, I'm the same way. Everyone makes mistakes, real men admit them and CORRECT them. Although your "mistakes" weren't bad in my opinion.

Personally I"m looking forward to the next story.

[Baby Ricochet]

Back when I was stationed at camp Pendleton. Thank you so much for reading my first story.

[That_Guy]

Near Oceanside? I've got a couple buddies there. No problem, keep 'em comin'

[That_Girl]

I used to live RIGHT on the border of Pendleton. In Oceanside. :)

[That_Guy]

hey the guys are talking!

(I'm jk, I'm trying to score Baby Ricochet Points)

[That_Girl]

Shut up loser. :p Pfft as if he needs them. ;)

[That_Guy]

babe... I always win

[That_Girl]

Nu uh. You never ever win. By the way... don't you dare think I didn't catch on to your intention in those 4 words. Sneaky, but not enough to get passed me.

[That_Girl]

Past*

[Baby Ricochet]

that's the place. I was 19 years old from a little town in South Carolina and I'd never seen so many hot girls in my life. There weren't girls like that where I was from. Attracting a girl like GIna was something I never thought I'd ever do. I'd never even met a girl like her let alone be in a serious relationship with. It was all uncharted territory to me.

[That_Girl]

Awww. What a lucky girl. That's so sweet. :)

[Mic]

Is most hard to admit to oneself our weaknesses, let alone share them. Time and exposure may temper some, while others require a valiant effort to balance. Seems you learn rather quickly, Ric.

Doesn't suck. Well written and honest. You're on your way!

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you so much for reading it mic. Much apprieciated

[Marie]

The story's okay. But what was the point to it? If somebody else had written it, would you be interested in it?

[Baby Ricochet]

That's a good question. I don't know if I would be or not. It's my first story so like my first poem not so great but on the plus side there is a lot less swearing in this piece.

[Baby Ricochet]

It's really more of a narrative like you're verbally telling a story to a group of friends. Non descriptive, no dialog.

[That_Girl]

There's a fine line between a healthy dose of jealousy and possessiveness. I agree with every point you made, the bar thing was legit but the co worker thing not so much. I think it's great that you were able to step back and realize you pushed a boundary line. Mad respect for that.

"Nick viewed me as an ignorant brutish jarhead that had no business being with a girl he wanted and I viewed him as a sniveling civilian coward with an a*s that was just begging to have my boot print stomped into it." Love that. Badass. lol

You should write more. :)

[Baby Ricochet]

My original intention was to write stories. Thank you so much for reading my first one.

[That_Girl]

You're very welcome. :)