VILE (clean)

I see the word "raw" in my reviews a lot

I list explicit in my titles

the words could be offensive

 

I've got a sewer in my mouth

and I'm far from passive

 

Drugs and sex and F bomb threats

my insanity from combat

 

11 year old girls and grandmas

they don't need to read that

 

My intention I should mention

Isn't to shock the faint of heart

 

I write raw and emotional

THat's the medium of my art

 

You may have studied English

Learned classics and all that

 

Sweetheart I'm an 80's baby

My influence is gangsta rap

 

So be forewarned it's a storm

of profanity that's coming

 

Graphic violence sexual aggression

hear the ominous drumming

 

Explicit warning on my poem

so you'll have to guess

 

Does Ricochet write poetry

or does he have tourettes 

 

Author's Note

I told you it was clean.

Reviews

[Pax]

i like this, its speak honest truth about your art. Me too, my english is quite bad sometimes, then to think its not really my native tongue. But we learn from everyone here..You write raw, because its what you felt and that's really good
its what poem really is..an emotional release..with a touch of humor..and that's you..
well done.

[Baby Ricochet]

thanx

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Like the preview warning; yes, I'm a grandma. BUT, I'm a 60's/70's babe ;) Loved this, anyhoo!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Perhaps I am odd, but "raw" doesn't always have a negative connotation for me. I went to actually look it up after reading this and I got stuck on "strong and undisguised" ..."in its natural state"..."frank and realistic" .... and to me that is sometimes very, very good. I suppose "raw" also reminds me of feelings that are still very painful, or not filtered through denial or our "proper" minds. So there is my take on "raw" - for what it is worth.
Now, this poem! I think it is very good and absolutely love your last lines. You are you and this is a big boat - there is something for everyone. Your art is an expression of your life experiences, your personality, and your perspective...love it!

[Baby Ricochet]

I don't think raw is negative. THis one's about poems I've written like PTSD' Bad Girl and Party baby. Not for the impessionable or easily offended

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

I understand.

[Chris]

We are whom we are... its only up to us to be whom we aren't

"I don't curse because I'm in pain... I curse when its so sharp I can't do anything else."

You take care man.
Chris

[Michael G.]

It's good to recognize that here there are eyes and ears that are "impressionable." That's why the "mature" selection is there. You eliminate at least some of those younger eyes. (Personally, I think it should be stronger, some how.) But, we should be aware of our surroundings, where ever we find ourselves.

Whenever I post something, I ask myself, "do I want a ten or twelve year old reading this? Do I want them to learn somethings about life from me and my writing? So what if you get less readers?

It's good you govern yourself. More should do so. It's the adult thing to do.
And this is "good" writing.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanx. I don't have any kids so I was a slow in realizing little girls that write cute poems about ponies were potentially reading my stuff. The warning label on this site reads more like a suggestion than an explicit warning. I don't think the message is strong enough and with me writing poems like PTSD and Party Baby. Readers need a stronger warning

[Michael G.]

When you use the "Mature" setting, they cannot read the writing. So, no eyes for ponies shall be able to wonder in.

[Baby Ricochet]

Oh I didn't know that. THat's good.

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

This is great. It is like a very well written Warning Contents Explicit label. Honest. Raw? Maybe not this one. But honest - you bet. Laughing after I took the tongue out of my cheek.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanx. Poems like "PTSD" and "Party Baby" definitely not for sensitive impressionable eyes and ears. You have to be on the piece to get the site's Explicit label so this way an impressionable reader doesn't even have to go that far.

[Marie]

This funny. But I've seen stuff on this site that makes yours read like Sunday school books. Nastiness just for the sake of being nasty. Ugliness that isn't raw; it's covered with mold and maggots. And I'm not even mentioning the erotica...

[Baby Ricochet]

About a month ago I reviewed an adorable poem about a pony by an 11 year old girl. She PMS me explaining she couldn't review my work because of all the swearing. Suddenly I realized little girls were reading my poems. I didn't think that was to cool . So I started with the warnings so they know not to even click on a title.

[Marie]

That's good. A warning should be sufficient. It's up to parents to monitor their children's Internet use.

[nigrum homonculus]

damn that was good! the ending made me laugh...but then again i think i swear too much in my poems and in life so i get you on that. another honest poem. your writing just gets better and better

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanx brotha