Understanding

Understand me when i feel like this... Throwing you a curve ball that i know you'll miss. Understand why I'm am so pissed. Why I vomit a little when you're in my mist. No there is no understanding with me. None our secrets they see. Just fond forgotten memories like our first kiss. Never thought that youd move on so quickly. Every girl that you talk look to me like a diss. Compare to me and what i did for and to you, they aint nothing. All haters dismissed. I thought in the begin that you found me. Saw the gravity in me and you ground me. Look! See the scares that are exposed. Guilt that I'm never to be set free. You think this love it new to me. You're this to me and we got history. Yup, chick I'm gonna always be apart of his story. We stomped around and got thorned. Messed around and feelings got torn. Flipping through relationships trying find how the hell did we trumped on bridges we burned. But loving you was a lesson well learned.

Reviews

[Poseidon]

Love the emotion from this. Relationships ending bring up a lot of feelings i feel you describe wonderfully. The lines "saw the gravity in me and you ground me" and " We stomped around and got thorned. Messed around and feelings got torn" were my absolute favorite parts. If you broke the lines up instead of having it in paragraph form it would give it a much better flow. Overall I loved reading this.

[Willard Wells]

I like it and it made me laugh. It does need work on flow. Maybe a little more punctuation.

The core of this piece is great and I love the message and it did make me smile. A smile and love are the best things to have.

Now that being said, it's your piece and any changes are only as you see and feel it will fit for your vision.