Reasons why...

Reasons why...
you're my friend,
I care,
we stick together,
you're amazing,
we are perfect,
you listen.
Yes,
only some of the reasons why...
I couldn't live without you.

Author's Note

Cheesy but true, and sadly so. One would think that a person should prefer themselves or couldn't live without food or water but for one to truly live they must have a friend who won't turn their back on them. So true, I'm lucky. It has been a little over one year since I met some of the best friends in my life. Sadly, one of them isn't happy. I want her to be happy because she means so much to me. At the root of this it sounds like I am looking out for her. I am ashamed because I feel so selfish. Trying to save her from thoughts because I couldn't possibly live without one of my best friends. I hope life gets better for her because I hate to see her like this but I will support her through thick and thin. I just hope she remembers that.

Reviews

[Savior of Time]

That's really sweet. I hope she gets better, too. She must be really glad that she has a friend like you. I think that she wants to get better, but she thinks she can't. After reading your "Author's Note", I can see that she means a lot to you, and ves versa. You really shouldn't feel ashamed or selfish; she wouldn't want you to. You couldn't have stopped the thoughts that reached her; don't get too down. Her life will get better, but I think she just doesn't want to admit it to herself that it will. Saying that you stick together, I think of me and my friend; we are like glue, or a little girl with icecream. I know, icecream, weird, but I really want some and there's some in my freezer. Point is, it reminds me of my friend and I. She listens, because she doesn't want to loose you, too, it seems. Even though this is "cheesy", it's deep. I truly love this. 100/100

[Phillitup]

One must write when they have inspiration, my friend gives me the hope that my dreams can come true. She will because I'm going to help her. So is another one of our friends. She does mean a lot to me. More than anyone could ever know. Ice cream is the perfect analogy in this case because our favorite people in the "world" that we look up to love ice cream. Ice cream is yummy, I had some today from TCBY. Thanks. :)

[Savior of Time]

:O *GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASP* LUUUUUUUUUUUUCKYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!

[Phillitup]

Right?!

Ya know why else I'm lucky? Because she's such a great friend. My friend should go to the freezer soon and get some ice cream. but not yet cause I'm talking to her.

[Savior of Time]

Haha! I bet she wants that icecream. Shoot, now I want some. :P

[Phillitup]

:)P

[Savior of Time]

dodododododo, i liiiiiike iiiiiicecreeeeeeam

[Alexa Tasch]

It short, but in those few lines you convey so much emotion. Its really touching and sweet. You must be a great friend!

[Phillitup]

thanks...:)

[Alexa Tasch]

you're welcome!

[Angela]

Its very adorable, a very old fashioned format of writing but it has its own unique spark of creativity! Very sweet... :)


-Angela-

[Phillitup]

thanks

[Lozzie]

This is so sweet! Yes... i have people like this in my life and yes there is no way i could live without them :) I hope your friend is alright :) You shouldn't feel selfish! If she means alot to you then you only need to make sure she knows :) Well done on another awesome peice of writing :)

[Phillitup]

thanks!

[AshleyKennedy]

It is really sweet, but also very generic. It's not specific to your friend, and how you feel about the situation. I believe your writing should express your deepest feelings, and not just try to appeal to the masses.

[Phillitup]

thanks

[Toni]

I really like this, it makes me think of my friends and I... Really good job! c:

[Phillitup]

thanks

[Seanh12]

This is really good i like it. Really sweet and nice of you too say about your friend. She must be glad to have a friend like you. I can see means a lot to you. I truely love this

[Phillitup]

thanks...

[Persona]

Very short and to the point! I think as a way to improve there are actually sentences where you have put commas and it's very stop and start. I think to make it flow more you should take some of the 'Author's note' and put it into the poem instead

[Phillitup]

thanks

[Salar Majak]

awwww :) this is soooo sweet,hopfully she'll remember. don't worry, real friend never forget!. and about the poem! a great structure
great job Dell

[Phillitup]

thanks!

[Icelanna]

Very supportive indeed and it is very heart warming to know you care! Lovely piece, i hope they have read it! :)

[Phillitup]

yup...they have

[disheveledApathy]

Friends are the greatest treasure of all. Hope things work out for both of you in the end, and this really isn't cheesy, it's sincere, which is sometimes mistaken for cheesy. ;D
-Mer