What I Wish

Sometimes
When I look up at the beaten stars
Who have been here much longer than I
Or gaze upon swirling winds
That have met more people
I wish with all my heart
That tomorrow won't be like today was
Maybe I'll find myself inside the window while I must
And longingly stay in the world that I control
Fly away in the arms of someone who cares
And wake up to find my world in harmony
Once again
For one more day
What I wish
Will come true

Author's Note

XXX 1/7/13

This poem is for one day of sanctuary that I think everyone in the world needs right about now.

-Dell

Reviews

[Riley Bray]

I found that to be a very serene and relaxing poem, although I must say the last line disappointed me a little because its so cliche. There are so many ways to write the same thing, so maybe you could change that little piece of it? Other than that, though, I think you created quite the lovely poem!

[Phillitup]

Thanks! I agree that it is a rather common phrase and I'll look into changing it. I think the words express what I want them to say though. I appreciate your opinion and feedback more than you know! THANKS!!! :)

[Riley Bray]

You betcha!

[Phillitup]

:)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Sounds like a wonderful plan to me. I believe if we continue to be optimistic, we will never lose hope. Beautiful work

[Phillitup]

thanks...:)

[Annabelle Lee]

this one's amazing, Dell! A sigh of relief for everyone. So optimistic and dreamy.

[Phillitup]

thanks

[Anna]

This is good, I enjoyed it! Some of the cutoff words (people.. (no need for was).. must..) were a little choppy, but in all I really liked it!

[Phillitup]

thanks, I'll look back at that

[floralhorror]

This is probably one of the best things i've read in a while.
I really like at the end, how you've split up a sentence to make four lines

Once again
For one more day
What I wish
Will come true

I like it more than I can say

[Phillitup]

Thank you SO much!

[floralhorror]

You're very welcome

[Salar Majak]

(I wish with all my heart
That tomorrow won't be like today was
Maybe I'll find myself inside the window while I must)
we do all need the sancuary, we all do Dell, an excellent poem, and amazingly Excellent poem.

[Phillitup]

Thank you very much!

[Salar Majak]

:)

[Bluefire]

This is a very beautiful poem. To me, it's someone in misery wishing desperately for a day in heaven.
I do hope your mother gets better, I'll be praying for her.
I suggest her seeing a docter, this could be something serious :(
Great write, well don. ^^

[Phillitup]

Thanks...:)

[Bluefire]

No problem ^^

[Admiral Kirk]

That's very beautiful... This poem carries a lot of meaning... I really hope things get better for you and your family soon.

[Phillitup]

Thanks

[Lina Grey]

A meaningful poem, bittersweet and emotional. I hope your mother recovers soon, and I hope your wishes come true for you.
"Who have been here much longer then I" -should be than, not then, sweet.

[Phillitup]

Thanks for everything. She's feeling a bit better today. Keeping my fingers crossed...:)

[Lina Grey]

:) that's good. I will too.

[quinfinn]

i hope that you may live your dreams, explore the beauty of our world and make many, many friends along the way. this poem is wonderful, and reminds me somewhat of my dilitante days and nights....using your poetry to express yourself is a fine start, and you have a gift for writing. never abandon the gifts you were betowed with in this short, tumultuous life.

[Phillitup]

thank you

[The Fallen]

Another amazing write! I hope your mother get's better!! I can feel your emotions within this write. Very nice flow.

[Phillitup]

Thanks for the wishes and words! Sometimes life must rise like dust before it can all fall into place. I appreciate your opinions. I know you read and write a lot of stories and books but poetry is a great thing. Thanks for bring the first review for this piece! I look forward to finding time to read more of your book!

[The Fallen]

Your welcome and Yes poetry is a wonderful thing, it allows our emotions to flow beautifully. Your welcome once again :)