Darkness

dark as the sun is
light
black as the sky is
blue
scared as a child is
innocent
happy as the depressed are
sad
dark as the black in the
night

Author's Note

Random. Please give me feedback, suggestions, reviews. ANYTHING!

XXX 1/2/12-1/3/12

Reviews

[Lina Grey]

love the change of colors here, the similes in each line. It just flows so smoothly, so easily. You know how dreams tend to have meanings without us even knowing it? I believe that poetry gets that way too. When you just write something completely random that just falls together into perfection, I feel like your subconscience is trying to communicate with you. These words tend to be wiser than we think ;) great write hun.

[Phillitup]

thanks

[LadyInk]

Amazing how you talk about colors but it makes me think of darkness more... You really got something!!

[Phillitup]

thank you

[krish]

awesome fella......I LOVED IT.....I WANNA GIVE U 92/100
.........have a look below:-)..
HEY....FELLA....READ OUT MY THIS POEM AS A SONG.......
MAY BE AFTER READ OUT U'D LIKE TO DEDICATE MY SONG TO ALL PREETY GIRL'S.............WATCH-OUT FELLA............;-)
"COLD AS ICE;
WANNA U LOVE WITH ME ALL NIGHT;
BLUEISH SKY;
WANNNA U STAY WITH ME ON MY SIDE;
DARK AS NIGHT;
WANNA U LOVE ME SO AS BRIGHT;
MOON AS WHITE;
WANNNA U SHINE EVERYDAY, ALL NIGHT;
MUSIC AS RHYME;
WANNA U SING WITH ME AT THE HEIGHT;
DANCE ALL NIGHT;
WANNA U HUG WITH U ME AT EVERY SIGHT;
U R SSSSSO BRIGHT;
WANNA U TOUCH THE HIGHEST SKY.........
SO.....COLD AS ICE.....................

[Phillitup]

thanks...:)

[krish]

hey,.........fella.....if i made this my song as a poem then how about u..?
would it work or not...........?

[Bluefire]

The colors and layout, as well as the meaning of each word adds a sinister feeling to this poem, yet it still only seems like the calm before the storm.
This is dark, it tells of light only to make the whole thing even darker.
Great write ^^

[Phillitup]

Thanks

[Bluefire]

No problem ^^

[quinfinn]

i love this in its entirety. how would you feel if i said that i think the last line would sound good written "dark as the black is night" ? it maintains the general flow, in a sense. excellent write!

[Phillitup]

Thanks1 I'll consider it!

[Annabelle Lee]

This is one of those poems we all seem to have. A thought that takes itself away. I've a feeling the poem actually wrote itself. Which is a good thing, by the way. And so put together. Wonderful

[Phillitup]

Thank you very much!

[Ahmad Cox]

Very meaningful and powerful message and I love the colors used to denote different words.

[Phillitup]

Thank you very much!

[Tasha]

Wow Dell. You've told me before that random poems are usually are best most meaningful pieces and this without a doubt was an example of your words put to action.

As a whole I thought this was truly a beautiful piece. I love the way you wrote it and I love the added colors for each added word and feeling. I enjoy your random writes. This was amazing.

Even though it is only day two of the new year so far so good and I am going to try really hard to stick to my main new years resolution. I'm glad you are as well. Keep up the amazing work Dell. Your words were beautifully told.

PS. I'm trying to write and put more thoughts into my reviews.
~Tasha

[Phillitup]

Thank you for the review. I made that resolution to myself a couple weeks ago. I feel like people appreciate my reviews and listen to me more if I do so. Yes, I am trying to keep with my writing resolution. Thank you so much for your immediate and thoughtful review! I really appreciate reviews like this, and from people I can trust too!

[Tasha]

You're welcome. That's my resolution this year alongside writing and posting everyday. I fell that general reviews are overlooked. I appreciate when you and other people take the time to review my work. I loved it. Hey whenever you need inspiration you can message me and vice versa. I appreciate your reviews and figured its the least I can do.

[Phillitup]

Okay, will do! Also, if you need tips for reviewing you can always ask me.

[Tasha]

Thanks I will!