In a World

Lost
beyond discovery
Torn
beyond repair
Dead
beyond awakening
In a world
I thought I knew

Author's Note

I don't know about this one. I feel like beyond is used to often but that gives it a familiar touch regarding the fact that the character felt like they knew the place. Please leave a review if you read! Tell me what you think!

XXX 12/29/12

Reviews

[Bluefire]

This made my mind picture the protagonist alone on a desolate planet, ready to give up after months or years of searching for other aliens like himself.
It makes me feel a touch of sadness and loneliness that, oddly, makes me thirst for more and want to know what happens next. It is amazing that you could achieve such a thing with so few words.
Well done! ^^

[Phillitup]

Thank you very much! I have often believed that the power of words is a mysterious thing.

[Bluefire]

I believe that as well. The power of words is such a complex, yet beautiful, thing, far beyond atleast my full understanding.
And, it was no problem. ^^

[MandaBear]

Very profound. I really like it. Great write

[Phillitup]

Thank you Amanda

[MandaBear]

Your welcome friend =)

[scripted]

i wish more than anything that your poems were longer... they are really good and would be exeptional if you would carry them out a little longer... but who am i to tell you how to write anyway nice job... yours truely danielle (scripted)

[Phillitup]

Thanks. I'm just not used to writing longer poetry. I don't know why.

[Theartofburning]

I hate using the same word twice,
but only if I have to I will.
This worked out well for you though.
Flows nicely.
*Thumbs up.

[Phillitup]

Thank you

[de_maruf]

beautiful

[Ambereen]

A lovely piece with a great depth ... I just loved the last line ..... It is so true ... there is so much more to know about the world and is people! Good work

[Olivia Marie]

short, but it has a feeling of depth. I like it, and beyond can be misused, However I like how you used it here.

[Phillitup]

thank you

[Shaylynn H.]

Short but sweet. It's not used too often either, it works.

[Aly]

Short and too the point :)

[Andorianskye]

amazing as always

[Phillitup]

thanks

[disheveledApathy]

Sounds like betrayal: it can lead to all of those things.