Chill

You may know this feeling well, I definitely crave this feeling.

Air bites my face
a chill runs up my spine
my adrenaline starts to pump
dew lands quietly on my face
and I breath in fresh air
cold stings my throat
and makes a smile curl on my lips
intimately
the dark night air fades
the black blanket of mystery
replaced by the chill
of a clear and crisp dawn
the feeling I love
of fresh morning air

Author's Note

I love this chill, as well as the chill of the rain. The cold (when it doesn't freeze you) can be the best and most refreshing feeling. Please review!
Best regards,
Dell

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the line "i start to wake up" could be left out...we are getting that with the rest of the poem..

paints a picture of the cold, the good cold and we can feel it.

did you mean "I breathe in fresh air"?
"replaced by the chill"?

like it...but agree with Neva...lots of articles and such could be cut out...is a bit wordy and would have more impact with concise lines.

[Phillitup]

I cut some of the articles...tell me what you think. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is tighter, yes.

[zainul]

Chill heals your heart.
Thanks for sharing through such a lovely work.

[Frieda P]

This is most pleasing, lovely sense of freedom and delight. Nice read.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Lovely poem. I would take a look at some of your words such as the and see how each line sounds is you remove some of them. Keep Writing!

[Phillitup]

Thank you. I took out a few of them when I went to fix some spelling issues...

[kublakhan27]

I'm not sure if you're talking about winter per se, but It's refreshing to know that someone feels the same exhilaration as I do in such a moment...people tend to look at me like I have ten heads on my shoulders when they find out winter is my favourite season lol

[Phillitup]

Winter is definitely my favorite season...

[kublakhan27]

Right on^^

[quinfinn]

you can do all the camping out you want, my friend, but i'm stayin indoors where it's warm! highly demonstrative of the exuberance and endurance of a youthful soul. "chilling" write!

[Phillitup]

Thank you very much!

[quinfinn]

welcome!