Crystal Clear

Crystal Clear

A Poem by Phillitup

like a droplet of everlasting water
floating on an infinitive lake
you are see-through

all of the lies, coming from you
your poor, selfish rumors
so consistent

what have I done to you in life
to make you treat me
like I am not human

for all that you have and will cause
what have I done to deserve
this

like a drop of ego that spreads throughout the soul
making it poisonous and broken
soul of no living things

the evil that was so strong, so terrible
that you would turn
on your best friend

is your heart like glass, fragile,
that is broken by hate
so that it shatters

what was once beautiful and clear
has broken to pieces
because of you

that beauty of a crystal blue lake
is poisoned by pollution
and greed

you would rather live a life alone with lies
then have a true
friend

I want to reach out to you and protect you
for all you've done
I still care

I don't want to see you drown
sinking in the darkness
of evil

or see you harshly slashed
by your own words
and hurt

I want to see you getting better
becoming who you really
are

I want you to be beautiful again
beautiful like a lake that's
crystal clear

© 2012 Phillitup


Author's Note

Phillitup
I thought of this poem and started writing. I think it's my longest poem on this website but I'm not sure. Anyhow, I hope you like it and enjoy reading it. I would appreciate comments and reviews.
Best regards,
Dell

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(is your heart like glass, fragile,
that is broken by hate
so that it shatters)
you really hit on my nerve with this, i know every word of what you mean, i've been through this and believe me it sucks.
great write, i love yournew way with rhyming, well done!

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Phillitup

11 Years Ago

Thank you



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good

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Phillitup

11 Years Ago

thanks
Dream Mistress

11 Years Ago

welcome
Crystal Clear
(Review for Change the World Competition) It can be so hard and frustrating trying to see through the eyes of another. Excellent craft and honesty in this work and you have captured the love and emotion magnificently.


Posted 11 Years Ago


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Phillitup

11 Years Ago

Thank you!
Wow, this is extremely intense and emotional.. Beautiful poem you've written here, Dell. And a happy new year to you (:

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Mir
This reminded me of your other writing, 'I Am Only Human'. I like the way this was formatted, and the story you seemed to tell! Great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ah, Monsieur!
The emotion, and raw sensations you have created here!
I love, love, love it!
The ending so inspirational!

*Swoon.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Phillitup

11 Years Ago

Thanks
"like a drop of ego that spreads throughout the soul" was an awesome line!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"I want you to be beautiful again
beautiful like a lake that's
crystal clear"
This last stanza was beautiful and my favorite, it really brought your whole poem together :)
Well done!

~Erinne




Posted 11 Years Ago


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Phillitup

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much Erinne!
(is your heart like glass, fragile,
that is broken by hate
so that it shatters)
you really hit on my nerve with this, i know every word of what you mean, i've been through this and believe me it sucks.
great write, i love yournew way with rhyming, well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Phillitup

11 Years Ago

Thank you
"I don't want to see you drown, sinking in the darkness of evil". This gave me goose bumps! Great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago



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I am 14-years-old. I find inspiration all over the place: memories, ideas, things I notice. I like believing in things that others find impossible. I think that's the way I hope for a better future. .. more..

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