Believe

in the future
the power
in dreams
in people
in the world
in hope
and despair
joy
and depression
indubitably
believe

Reviews

[Green]

For the most part, I liked this but I do have a few comments.
In the lines:
the power
in dreams
I assumed you were trying to say in the power in dreams but it being on two lines kind of made it a little hard to get the first time through, even though I understand that to match the rest of the poem it has to be that way.
Also I'm not really sure of the purpose of indubitably in there (Which by the way I had to look up because I had no idea what it meant). Maybe it's just me not thinking very deeply right now but I don't see where unquestionable fits into this.
Now for the fun part:
I liked the air of hope this gave off. My favorite part was about believing in people and the world because I tend to be an eternal optimist and try to hope for the best.

[Phillitup]

Thank you very much for actually taking time to read and provide real feedback on my work. I prefer having stuff I might not want to hear or believe then getting the "It's AMAZING!" fluff that I can''t learn from. Thanks again for all the reviews I have just read from you. They are thoughtful and bring to light a lot, if only emotions and such. I appreciate it.

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

Believe
(Review for Change the World Competition) From the section where I review I cannot see the authors name or any other details. I would like to know more about this work as I feel something is missing but not sure what. There is a powerful jab being shot at the readers nose here, I am just not sure what emotion is throwing the punch; philosophy, frustration, love or hope. Unfortunately more people probably believe in despair and depression than believe in hope and people. Given the actions of the world governments very few possibly believe in the world right now. My interpretation of this is one of a philosophical punch, born from angst at the stupidity of humanity. I do like this work and you have done a great job.

[Phillitup]

Thank you very much!