I am only Human

Yes, I've made mistakes. Categorically. In fact, I'll admit something. I have torn you down, thrashed the contents of your hopes and dreams. Crying, hitting myself for what I had done, I fell to the floor. I tried to snatch the dissolving pieces of them. I eradicated them. Obliterated them. I'm sorry. You may never forgive me, you may think I'm oblivious to the harm I've created. Whatever. I don't care what you think from here on out. I made a mistake, we all do. Sure, mine was bad. I'm not trying to blame someone else, or claim that I didn't do it. I'm trying to say sorry. No...that'll never be enough for you. Here are your mistakes:
1) Saying it was fine and then turning around and blaming your life on me.
2) Never forgiving me, your best friend.
3) Turning your back the one time I'm trying to get help.
3) Spreading rumors, telling lies.
You've turned my one mistake into a thought that haunts me. I hear everyone say it as they point and stare. You've ruined me and my reputation. I sit in the corner, afraid of the ringing bell. Afraid because as soon as you start to taunt me again, I don't know if it will ever stop. If I turn and leave the Earth right now will you cry? Will you actually think about the fact that it's your fault? Will you feel sorry? What will you do? Anything? For all your mistakes, I'm forgiving you. In my eyes, you are free of sin. Me? Never. You don't care about me. I still care about you. Girls are so dramatic! I shouldn't have become your friend. Your a witch. Oh well...if no one else can see that, I guess I'm on my own. After all, I am only human.

Author's Note

This is written from a boys point of view, wasn't sure if you noticed. No, this isn't a true story, I made it up. I'd love some reviews!

Reviews

[Leigh]

In the casual dialog style you have used you have mapped out your thoughts in a very easy way to understand and relate to, which is a great skill to have and great to be able to read. Because you are so young I am looking forward to and can only imagine that your work will progress a great deal, great stuff

[Phillitup]

Thank you very much for your considerate review! I appreciate it!

[Mir]

Great use of vocabulary! You can kind of like 'feel'/'sense' the venom in this writing/words! Great job!

[Phillitup]

Thank you

[Salar Majak]

it represents the anger of misunderstanding, it's like ranting, only better, i like it, i still think that you are attached some how emotionaly to the massacre of the school kids, such a horrible thing but yeah, i like it! good job

[Dinali Sathma]

Reminded me of the conflicts I would have with my best friend. True, girls can be overdramatic and maybe if you had personally experience this kind of stuff the story would have been different. I'd expect anger bolstered and hatred coating the words (although it is slightly visble towards the end). But then, people are different. So its fair for someone to have such loyal thoughts.
For constructive criticism I'd advise you against using bullet points. They reduce your capacity to insert emotion.
Here goes the admiration :- Its once again, a superb piece of work I greatly enjoyed. You have captured the emotion of sorrow real impressively.

[Pawprints]

You sir, are an amazing writer (and I'm not saying for your age because I always hated that). You've captured this feeling unbelievably well. Keep it up!

[Bluefire]

This could very well make a great chapter in a book ^^
I do agree with him, even though I am a girl, girls can get a bit overly dramatic.
Well done, Phillitup.

[CHRIS ANDES]

yes, you talk of reality
and the title exactly fits the whole piece
=]

[ℰmerald ⚓]

wow, I thought this was something in your life that happened recently. Great write, it truly seemed as though these were your emotions. Good job.

[Phillitup]

thanks...I'm glad it came off that way

[scripted]

we all make mistakes... but thoughs who are willing to admit that they have done something wrong are thoughs who are most the time forgiven... nice job on this one keep the good work up...

[Tasha]

Wow, I actually thought that this was a true story. This was amazing, and so realistic.

[Phillitup]

thanks!