Coming

The world
is swirling around me
tumbling
like a whirlwind

Life
is passing by
swiftly
like traffic on a green light

Today
is completely gone
tomorrow
is approaching fast

It's coming
going
leaving
amazing

Why won't
the
world
slow

Reviews

[Ees]

Damn girl! and you're young yet! It'll only go faster and faster from here on out! Each day, week, month, year gets progressively faster as it slides away from you! Before you know it, you'll be thinking about the time you and your best friend hiked a mountain together, remembering it as if it happened last week only to realize that it has been a whole decade since that time.

Beautiful job on the poetry. It is relatable and true! Though I don't think that whirlwinds "tumble"... so you may want to look at your word choices in that part and think about what you think of them. As a whole I love this poem and think that you did a fantastic job!

[Phillitup]

thanks for your helpful review...i'll consider changing the word

[Mir]

If I had a dime for everytime I've felt like this.
Interesting side to put this on! Great writing, as usual! :) I still find it hard to believe that you're only 13. lol

[David Scott]

I do not like the right hand margin for this...
The poetry itself was fine my friend. Breath. That is all you can control while you are still above ground or water...
A fine protection of your state of mind.

[Phillitup]

i used the right side to offer a different perspective as to how the world is slanted and confusing...

[David Scott]

I understand. Just my honest feeling... I don't like certain colors either. That only means I have a preference.