Tired

My eyes
Beg
To close

My head
Begs
To slump

To sleep
But
I can't

Not allowed
To
Rest Yet

Must finish
All
My homework

Go to
The
Whole rehearsal

To write
For
A bit

To read
for
The paper

My bed
Calls
Me

I am
fully
utterly tired

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Science was certainly frustrating but nothing is more frustrating than wanting to sleep and being unable to for any number of reasons, then again I have regular bouts of insomnia so this one has some extra meaning for me...another vivid snapshot of a particular state of mind^^

[Phillitup]

Thank you!

[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I know the feeling of this poem. Hard to find sleep with a busy schedule. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Phillitup]

thanks

[Leigh]

You are using more words now, but still with so few you have expressed your point well, I can feel the tiredness

[Lunette Lariz]

Yes, students' complaints. :)

[RachelReaper]

i know the feeling. heh. nice description of it, i liked this.

[Phillitup]

I've felt it a lot lately.

[RachelReaper]

keep your head up

[Phillitup]

:)

[ms. barrie]

i enjoy the style, structure you choose to write this poem, i love the last three lines. very good job, thanks for sharing

[Brookypoo]

I would have to say...maybe u should just take a nap

[Phillitup]

lol!

[Brookypoo]

well if ur that tired...:) take a quick nap and go to bed early at night...might help..:)

[Phillitup]

I can't

school all day, rehearsal almost all night

[Brookypoo]

oh sorry.

[Riley Mistwood]

sounds like my everyday lol

[Phillitup]

agreed

[David Scott]

This felt like the flickering flame about to burn out from the wick drowning in melted wax. Enjoyed this write!

[Phillitup]

I hadn't thought to look at it that way. Thanks!

[Ees]

Wonderful!
There is often so much to do, but the body needs rest when it needs rest and at a certain that starts to intrude upon your thoughts. You have portrayed that very well in this poem!
There is one teeny tiny glitch that I found in this stanza:
"My bed
calls
Me there"
It isn't that there is anything wrong with it, but as I read your poem out loud it sounded funny, if you know what I mean. I might consider rewording that stanza or simply removing the word "there". I don't think that the "there" is necessary. If your bed is calling to you, we understand what that entails.

Great work again. You do a wonderful job of depicting life's moments in an easy to read way. I mean easy to read in a good way, not a talking down to you sort of way. People who write complex poetry, are, in my own opinion, just trying to cover up for the fact that they have no idea what they are talking about, while also being snobs.

Good job!

[Phillitup]

thank you!

[Ees]

welcome