Despair

For all of those who don't know where to turn, and those who have watched someone do so.

"Despair"

Lonely
Lost
Scared
Worried
Sadness
Depression
Dry tundra
Desperate
For everything
anything

Author's Note

I would like some reviews please!

Reviews

[Ezekiel Silver]

Interesting poem. I don't think I've ever seen this style of poetry before, I like it! Nice work!!

[Phillitup]

thanks you! it's always good to try something new!

[Pax]

Despair in all its forms and faces...i say you put it really well..

[Phillitup]

thank you

[Pax]

edited for some typo...and your welcome

[Phillitup]

?

[Pax]

sorry..i did some typo error on my review now its fixed...

[Phillitup]

oh! makes sense! ok!

[Hanakuso]

I love everything... except for the "dry tundra" part. I don't really get the connection. Otherwise, the emotions of despair are fluently expressed with minimalism. Love it!

[Phillitup]

thank you

[Howard Blacklove]

Quick and two the point. I admire this style very much. Its alot harder to express something complex with a limited amount of words. Great job buddy!

[Phillitup]

thanks

[Sid]

Quite a few ways to describe despair, i especially like the metaphorical "dry tundra", it signifies distance and the cold and that adds a new dimension to this poem...great write!!

[Theartofburning]

I like it, but I think you could do more with it.
Show more emotion behind your words.

[kublakhan27]

I was gonna say it's short and sweet but sweet would obviously be a misnomer in light of the subject matter...it certainly makes its point loud and clear with a minimum of words, and "Dry tundra" marks a sudden shift from descriptive to figurative, making it almost symbolic of a person in despair, who is in the process of withdrawal from others...I hope that makes sense lol :P

[Phillitup]

of course it makes sense! thank you very much!

[kublakhan27]

lol No problem :)

[Phillitup]

:)

[RachelReaper]

all very true words to describe despair. God knows all of us can agree.

[Phillitup]

:)

[Tori Hughes]

very well done. sad, but real, if that makes sense.

[Phillitup]

definetley

[ms. barrie]

i very much enjoyed the simplicity of this, very thought provoking, your words, indeed conjure up the feelings of...despair. great job

[Phillitup]

thanks